The following appeared in a letter from a firm providing investment advice to a client.
“Homes in the northeastern United States, where winters are typically cold, have traditionally used oil as their major fuel for heating. Last year that region experienced twenty days with below-average temperatures, and local weather forecasters throughout the region predict that this weather pattern will continue for several more years. Furthermore, many new homes have been built in this region during the past year. Because of these developments, we predict an increased demand for heating oil and recommend investment in Consolidated Industries, one of whose major business operations is the retail sale of home heating oil.”
The writer claims that there will be an increased demand in for heating oil because of the recent below average temperatures of the local weathers.
There doesn’t seem to be clarity on if oil is the only means of heating buildings, perhaps it is one of the major means. There is a gap on information as to what modern methods are been used for heating and if oil to sill been used in contemporary times and not just a vintage peoples thing.
Most importantly, it is unclear if the below average temperature is a matter of hotness or coldness so there is no justification on it there will be need for heating or perhaps cooling as the case may be.
If it is assumed that the below average temperatures meant the increase in temperature (coldeness), the writer also fails to provide certainty of reoccurrence of the below-average temperatures as this might be a one off scenario and not a case for alarm.
Depending on the price of heating oil and other rudimentary concerns, it is unclear if the people will have large demand for oil or will shift to contemporary sources for heating.
Furthermore, it is unclear as to whether the newly built homes factored in the below average temperatures and provided for alternative source of heating and what measures have older inhabitant have put into place.
Moreso, for the writer’s claim to be justified he will have to showcase the relationship between the change in temperature to the direct purchase of oil.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 8 15
No. of Words: 254 350
No. of Characters: 1178 1500
No. of Different Words: 125 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.992 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.638 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.821 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 77 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 64 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 36 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 25 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 31.75 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.868 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.463 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.932 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.129 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 7 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 11, column 28, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...r heating. Furthermore, it is unclear as to whether the newly built homes factored in the b...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, may, so, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 13.6137724551 15% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 10.0 28.8173652695 35% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 55.5748502994 65% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 16.3942115768 18% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1224.0 2260.96107784 54% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 253.0 441.139720559 57% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83794466403 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98822939669 4.56307096286 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94132765868 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 125.0 204.123752495 61% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.494071146245 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 400.5 705.55239521 57% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 19.7664670659 40% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 22.8473053892 136% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 37.9802580297 57.8364921388 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 153.0 119.503703932 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.625 23.324526521 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.625 5.70786347227 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.133235151499 0.218282227539 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0712239061698 0.0743258471296 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0283685444633 0.0701772020484 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0741092709138 0.128457276422 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0333290875424 0.0628817314937 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 14.3799401198 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.01 48.3550499002 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 12.197005988 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 98.500998004 57% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 11.1389221557 129% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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