The following appeared in a magazine article about planning for retirement.
"Clearview should be a top choice for anyone seeking a place to retire, because it has spectacular natural beauty and a consistent climate. Another advantage is that housing costs in Clearview have fallen significantly during the past year, and taxes remain lower than those in neighboring towns. Moreover, Clearview's mayor promises many new programs to improve schools, streets, and public services. And best of all, retirees in Clearview can also expect excellent health care as they grow older, since the number of physicians in the area is far greater than the national average."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
This argument is well presented yet far-fetched. It lays a claim that Clearview is a top choice for a place to retire. Nevertheless, due to several flaws after a close scrutiny, the argument has to establish some pieces of evidence to make the statement more convincing.
First of all, a problem arises in this argument that the author claims that Clearview has spectacular natural beauty and a consistent climate. However, this contention of the description is very weak and obscure and is open to a number of interpretations. For example, if the static climate means that this place is desert, it is definitely stable, but do many people like to live in a desert? I do not think so. Everyone has different images when he or she hears such of description. We would never know which climate is true of Clearview. Hence, without accounting for and ruling out other likely explanation, by no means could the author contend that the weather is good so that Clearview is the top place to choose.
Moreover, even though the writer might be able to provide enough information for us to deduce a solution to the problem presented above afterwards, the argument still maintains ill-conceived. Another problem could be that the writer states that the housing costs in Clearview has fallen, and taxes remain low. But the writer does not mention what the exact price is. Although housing costs are falling and taxes are low, they are totally possible that the money which needs to spend on it is still high and general people cannot afford it. To corroborate this point, the author should pay a close heed t as well as cope with the representative possibilities mentioned above. Only the evidence of real number is the key to bolstering his recommendation.
Ultimately, even if the foregoing assumptions might turn out to be supported by ensuring evidence, a crucial problem remains that the article points out retirees in Clearview can also expect excellent health because of the increase of physicians, but this statement does not make sense since the increasing physicians are not equal the health care system in Clearview will become better. In this light, it is reasonable to cast doubts upon the author's presumption which I reject as inadequate, in that the numbers of physicians cannot represent the entire care system. In contrast, the article must list much more detail information on health care fields such as the fund in health care in Clearview, the numbers of hospitals, and the rate of the dead.
In retrospect, it seems precipitous for the author to jump to the conclusion based on a series of problematic premises. To dismiss the specter of the implausibility of his recommendation, the author ought to come to grips with all existing flaws and offer more specific evidence to make the argument more convincing.
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Essay evaluation report
also need to argue:
Moreover, Clearview's mayor promises many new programs to improve schools, streets, and public services.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 474 350
No. of Characters: 2296 1500
No. of Different Words: 243 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.666 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.844 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.764 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 165 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 113 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 81 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 58 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.571 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.066 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.619 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.27 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.499 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.065 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 163, Rule ID: CLOSE_SCRUTINY[1]
Message: Use simply 'scrutiny'.
Suggestion: scrutiny
...ertheless, due to several flaws after a close scrutiny, the argument has to establish some pie...
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Line 4, column 444, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...t is reasonable to cast doubts upon the authors presumption which I reject as inadequat...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...f hospitals, and the rate of the dead. In retrospect, it seems precipitous for th...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, still, well, as to, for example, in contrast, such as, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 28.8173652695 115% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 55.5748502994 115% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 16.3942115768 134% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2348.0 2260.96107784 104% => OK
No of words: 474.0 441.139720559 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95358649789 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66599839874 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87360359257 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 252.0 204.123752495 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53164556962 0.468620217663 113% => OK
syllable_count: 727.2 705.55239521 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.22255489022 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 77.1387124107 57.8364921388 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.80952381 119.503703932 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5714285714 23.324526521 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.90476190476 5.70786347227 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189230148257 0.218282227539 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0528587961669 0.0743258471296 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0752193682749 0.0701772020484 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0949423950633 0.128457276422 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0430088272124 0.0628817314937 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.3550499002 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 98.500998004 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.