Here the argument states that the city of Grandview shall put a stop in providing funding to the Grandview Symphony Orchestra, and assumes that the symphony will see an upsurge in revenue in the upcoming years without getting any financial help from this particular city of Grandview due to the following facts: firstly, private sponsors to the orchestra augmented by 200 percent last year; secondly, the audiences of the orchestra doubled for the particular concerts-in-park series; finally, the orchestra has declared to enhance the cost of its tickets for the upcoming year. However, the entire argument is not cogent and has several flaws.
First of all, even though the number of private sponsors to the symphony has enhanced by 200 percent, there is no information given in the claim that whether these private sponsors will continue to contribute in future years as well. On the other hand, the claim has not mentioned that the private contributors from last year are still continuing to sponsor in this year or not. Moreover, actual number of sponsors are needed to evaluate this point. Percentages are not enough to have a thorough evaluation.
Secondly, the statement argues that the audience of concert-in-the-park series has increased by 100 percent, however, no information about the actual number of audience is given. It can an increase of one audience to an existing number of one audience, or even an increase of 50 audiences to an existing number of 50 audiences. Without information about the exact number people coming to watch the show, this point remains unconvincing.
All in all, the argument states that the symphony is about to enhance its ticket price for the coming year. Nevertheless, it has not stated the current ticket value and the extra amount to be added to the current value. This information is needed to avoid assumption and strengthen this point.
In conclusion, the statement could have been stronger if the discussed matters were revealed in it. Without answers to the mentioned facts, the statement seems more of a wishful thinking based simply on a couple of assumptions, and thus remains open to debate. Therefore, it cannot be said that the symphony is going to flourish in the coming years without economical help from the city of Grandview based on this argument.
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Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not OK
argument 2 -- not OK
argument 3 -- not OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 382 350
No. of Characters: 1887 1500
No. of Different Words: 176 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.421 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.94 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.676 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 144 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 112 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 78 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 43 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.875 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 16.236 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.625 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.311 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.566 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.054 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, thus, well, in conclusion, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 55.5748502994 113% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1946.0 2260.96107784 86% => OK
No of words: 381.0 441.139720559 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10761154856 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8059940153 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 204.123752495 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.472440944882 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 587.7 705.55239521 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 122.775241804 57.8364921388 212% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 129.733333333 119.503703932 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4 23.324526521 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.4 5.70786347227 200% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200466799619 0.218282227539 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0503199233475 0.0743258471296 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100225668396 0.0701772020484 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114064055477 0.128457276422 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.125821606248 0.0628817314937 200% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 14.3799401198 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.3550499002 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 98.500998004 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 27.0 12.3882235529 218% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.