The following appeared in a memo from the mayor of the town of West Egg.
"Two years ago, our consultants predicted that West Egg's landfill, which is used for garbage
disposal, would be completely filled within five years. During the past two years, however, town
residents have been recycling twice as much aluminum and paper as they did in previous
years. Next month the amount of material recycled should further increase since charges for
garbage pickup will double. Furthermore, over ninety percent of the respondents to a recent
survey said that they would do more recycling in the future. Because of our residents' strong
commitment to recycling, the available space in our landfill should last for considerably longer
than predicted."
The mayor of town of West Egg. is convinced that the available space in the landfill of West Egg. to have some room for future use for a considerable amount of time. The author comes to the conclusion relying on the resident's putatively strong commitment to recycle their waste. The author needs to ponder upon the following three questions and clarify the assumptions that seem unwarranted. This might make the argument more sound and cogent.
How much does the recycling of aluminium and paper by the residents, impede the process of the landfill getting filled up? Perhaps, the aluminium and the paper that the residents have been recycling in doubled rate since the last time consultants foresaw the landfill space crunch two years back, might not be effective enough to hinder the process significantly. It is possible the contribituion of other elements like plastics and clothing materials may have a larger impact on the process of the landfill filling up. The author needs to involve himself into getting an idea of the composition of the average amount of waste that gets disposed.
Does the doubling of charges ensure the increase of recyling endeavours by the residents? It is possible the residents who have already been contributing to the good cause by recycling at doubled rates might get dejected and discouraged due to the increase in garbage pickup charges.This might lead to the residents becoming apathetic to the cause and increase littering aroud the town of West Egg. The author should take into consideration the sentiment of the residents to impose such an price increase to prevent any possible backlash.
What renders the conducted survey reliable? Perhaps the a wider section of the residents didn't take the survey with seriousness and responded to it callously. It might also be possible that the response of the survey is promising because the people might be hoping for some conditional incentives that they might receive for recycling their waste. Rather they are incognizant of the fact that the garbage pickup prices are going to increase. Adding to the above possibility the survey's reliability is further questionable, as it provides no estimate of the waste that would be recylable, by a particular resident and his family (if present). The author must include more basis for the survey for example how much waste is generated by a family and how much of that is estimated to be recylable, to get an lucid simulacrum of the issue at hand.
In conclusion, based on the unwarranted assumptions as stated above the argument stands infirm. The author should conduct an even more detailed survey, and also take into consideration the composition of the dross that is dumped into the landfill. This would help the mayor of the town of West Egg. to come to a better conclusion and fortify the argument.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 474 350
No. of Characters: 2326 1500
No. of Different Words: 217 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.666 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.907 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.683 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 168 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 126 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 93 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 60 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.7 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.812 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.3 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.314 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.314 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.071 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 32, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Is
The mayor of town of West Egg. is convinced that the available space in t...
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Line 1, column 99, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: To
...able space in the landfill of West Egg. to have some room for future use for a con...
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Line 2, column 5, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...he argument more sound and cogent. How much does the recycling of aluminium and pap...
^^^^
Line 3, column 283, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: This
... the increase in garbage pickup charges.This might lead to the residents becoming ap...
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Line 3, column 487, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...ntiment of the residents to impose such an price increase to prevent any possible ...
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Line 4, column 52, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'a' is left.
Suggestion: the; a
... the conducted survey reliable? Perhaps the a wider section of the residents didnt ta...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 89, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...ps the a wider section of the residents didnt take the survey with seriousness and re...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 217, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...ossible that the response of the survey is promising because the people might be hoping for ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 348, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Rather,
...ight receive for recycling their waste. Rather they are incognizant of the fact that t...
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Line 4, column 478, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'surveys'' or 'survey's'?
Suggestion: surveys'; survey's
...se. Adding to the above possibility the surveys reliability is further questionable, as...
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Line 4, column 800, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...at is estimated to be recylable, to get an lucid simulacrum of the issue at hand. ...
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Line 5, column 299, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: To
...help the mayor of the town of West Egg. to come to a better conclusion and fortify...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 55.5748502994 124% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2364.0 2260.96107784 105% => OK
No of words: 472.0 441.139720559 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00847457627 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6610686524 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74940906659 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 204.123752495 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.472457627119 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 748.8 705.55239521 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.677931835 57.8364921388 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.782608696 119.503703932 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5217391304 23.324526521 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.17391304348 5.70786347227 38% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.25449101796 228% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177255582914 0.218282227539 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0605572549034 0.0743258471296 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0972885296388 0.0701772020484 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0999651062557 0.128457276422 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0449352558808 0.0628817314937 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 98.500998004 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 12.3882235529 48% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.