The following appeared in a memo from the vice president of a food distribution company with food storage warehouses in several cities."Recently, we signed a contract with the Fly-Away Pest Control Company to provide pest control services at our fast-food

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The following appeared in a memo from the vice president of a food distribution company with food storage warehouses in several cities.
"Recently, we signed a contract with the Fly-Away Pest Control Company to provide pest control services at our fast-food warehouse in Palm City, but last month we discovered that over $20,000 worth of food there had been destroyed by pest damage. Meanwhile, the Buzzoff Pest Control Company, which we have used for many years, continued to service our warehouse in Wintervale, and last month only $10,000 worth of the food stored there had been destroyed by pest damage. Even though the price charged by Fly-Away is considerably lower, our best means of saving money is to return to Buzzoff for all our pest control services."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.

In this memo, the vice president suggests that the food company should return to Buzzoff for all the pest control services according to his inferences. However, there are many flaws in the article before he jumps to the conclusion.

He mentions that over $20,000 worth of food under Fly-Away’s control had been destroyed by pest damage, while warehouse in Wintervale only lost $10,000. Before deciding to cancel the contract with Fly-Away, it needs the data of the weather condition between the two cities. If the average temperature in Palm City is rather higher than that of Wintervale and it rains frequently than Wintervale, then it has to list the average number of lost food because of pest. Under the certain standard, it may be fair to evaluate whether the company should sign all contracts with Buzzoff.

The food distribution company recently signed a contract with Buzzoff. Nevertheless, it doesn’t specify how long their contract has taken effect. Even though it has cooperated for half years, the vice president didn’t provide readers with each month’s data. It’s likely that Wintervale suffered from serious pest before Fly-Away dealt with it, and it continually lowers the number of food cost. On the other hand, it’s also likely that it only starts the work two months, and there are horrible pests which aren’t easy to be killed. In this case, Fly-Away needs time to set the equipment there and make sure it’s well-functioned.

At the end of the article, the vice president recommends that the company returning to Buzzoff for all services to save money. It doesn’t mention that how much the setting cost of two companies, so it’s too risky to make this conclusion. We need to know exact price of both services. Take the number of food cost caused by pest from memo, we still hypothesize $10,000 and $20,000 respectively. It’s possible that the efficiency of Buzzoff indeed better than Fly-Away, but the cost of Buzzoff is $50,000. To the food company, it spends $40,000 to deal with the thorny problem. On the contrary, it assumes that the cost of Fly-Away is only $20,000, then the expense is $30,000. In this big scope, it’s obvious that choosing Fly-Away can meet the goal of saving money.

To sum up, before deciding to return all money to Buzzoff, it still needs more evidence to support the idea.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, still, then, well, while, as to, on the contrary, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.6327345309 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 55.5748502994 108% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1986.0 2260.96107784 88% => OK
No of words: 393.0 441.139720559 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0534351145 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66203976741 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 204.123752495 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516539440204 0.468620217663 110% => OK
syllable_count: 584.1 705.55239521 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.22255489022 261% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.9741188966 57.8364921388 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 94.5714285714 119.503703932 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7142857143 23.324526521 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.95238095238 5.70786347227 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.396006864311 0.218282227539 181% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117238575209 0.0743258471296 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0933324641233 0.0701772020484 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.2108529693 0.128457276422 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.111865258912 0.0628817314937 178% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.3799401198 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.3550499002 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 98.500998004 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 397 350
No. of Characters: 1865 1500
No. of Different Words: 203 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.464 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.698 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.375 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 130 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 90 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 54 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 29 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.905 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.715 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.524 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.295 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.484 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.077 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5