The following appeared in a memorandum from the general manager of KNOW radio station.
Several factors indicate that radio station KNOW should shift its programming from rock and roll music to a continuous news format. Consider, for example, the number of older people in our listening area has increased dramatically, while the total number of our listeners has recently declined. Also, music stores in our area report decreased sales of recorded music. Finally, continuous news in neighboring cities have been very successful, and survey taken just before the recent election shows that local citizens are interested in becoming better informed about politics.
The general manager of the KNOW radio station has recommended a memorandum which indicates several factors that the KNOW radio station should shift to the news programme instead of the rock and roll music. For fortifying this view the manager has given a suitable several reasons and factors for its approval. The various reasons which he/she shows is that the number of the older people in that city is increasing and the number of the listeners to their radio stations are continuously decreasing. The memorandum also shows the survey taken just before the recent election that people are more interested in the better knowing about the political. But this all assumptions has many flaws in taking a consideration that radio station should change his programme from rock and roll music to the news.
The first reason which undermines the managers claim is that he/she takes the result of the survey which was taken just before the recent election. But, when was the recent election? Was it a week ago ? Or before few months. It is very much necessary to have the extra details of when the election was and what survey did it conduct? And even if the survey claim that the people are more interested in the becoming better informed about politics. It is obvious because it was just before the election and hence people has a high buzz about political news and high eagerness to know its detail. But after elections the situations may be different. There is no proof that still people are eager to know the news on politics. Hence it is not right to make a claim without knowing the current situations.
The second claim the manager makes is that number of people in the area has increased. It is not always necessary that the older people only prefers news no where the memorandum shows any proof that the older people prefers news instead of the rock and roll music. The number of people in the area has increased but the manager fails to mention how many? What percentage of the listeners are the older people and how many new old listeners were added.
The other point that the manager assumes that the number of record sales of music in the area has decreased. Does this mean people has stop listening music. It may be the case that the number of record of the rock and roll music has increased. No where does this point is taken into consideration. Further more, the people who buy music record are not the same who listen them and hence this seriously undermines the managers claim.
In sum, taking all this cases into consideration it is very much necessary for the manager to have certain full proof surveys that bolster the claim for change in the program such as the percentage of the number of the old people, decrease in number of the overall listeners of the radio station and the people’s intent towards rock and roll music. Without certain fortified surveys it shows that the manager’s claim is full of flaw.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 24, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
The general manager of the KNOW radio station has recommended a memoran...
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Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...um which indicates several factors that the KNOW radio station should shift to the news ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...m that the people are more interested in the becoming better informed about polit...
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Line 2, column 724, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...are eager to know the news on politics. Hence it is not right to make a claim without...
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Line 4, column 155, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...that the older people only prefers news no where the memorandum shows any proof th...
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Line 6, column 245, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: Now
... the rock and roll music has increased. No where does this point is taken into con...
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Line 6, column 270, Rule ID: DOES_NP_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'be'?
Suggestion: be
...has increased. No where does this point is taken into consideration. Further more,...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'hence', 'if', 'may', 'second', 'so', 'still', 'such as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.270417422868 0.25644967241 105% => OK
Verbs: 0.150635208711 0.15541462614 97% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0907441016334 0.0836205057962 109% => OK
Adverbs: 0.043557168784 0.0520304965353 84% => OK
Pronouns: 0.02722323049 0.0272364105082 100% => OK
Prepositions: 0.114337568058 0.125424944231 91% => OK
Participles: 0.038112522686 0.0416121511921 92% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.39058513198 2.79052419416 86% => OK
Infinitives: 0.016333938294 0.026700313972 61% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.148820326679 0.113004496875 132% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00725952813067 0.0255425247493 28% => Some modal verbs wanted.
WH_determiners: 0.0290381125227 0.0127820249294 227% => Maybe 'Which' is overused. If other WH_determiners like 'Who, What, Whom, Whose...' are used too in sentences, then there are no issues.
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2943.0 2731.13054187 108% => OK
No of words: 514.0 446.07635468 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.72568093385 6.12365571057 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76146701107 4.57801047555 104% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.311284046693 0.378187486979 82% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.20233463035 0.287650121315 70% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.11673151751 0.208842608468 56% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0953307392996 0.135150697306 71% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39058513198 2.79052419416 86% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 207.018472906 94% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.377431906615 0.469332199767 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 43.0361909328 52.1807786196 82% => OK
How many sentences: 26.0 20.039408867 130% => OK
Sentence length: 19.7692307692 23.2022227129 85% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.547396465 57.7814097925 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.192307692 141.986410481 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7692307692 23.2022227129 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.384615384615 0.724660767414 53% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 3.58251231527 195% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 40.0026938043 51.9672348444 77% => OK
Elegance: 1.90983606557 1.8405768891 104% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.519345866263 0.441005458295 118% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.120115957263 0.135418324435 89% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0915400991182 0.0829849096947 110% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.557186491961 0.58762219726 95% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.207908903106 0.147661913831 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.205965817945 0.193483328276 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.14782890709 0.0970749176394 152% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.584001558456 0.42659136922 137% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0285329403271 0.0774707102158 37% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.393192848306 0.312017818177 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.118595911508 0.0698173142475 170% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.33743842365 144% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.87684729064 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.82512315271 166% => OK
Positive topic words: 12.0 6.46551724138 186% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 5.36822660099 93% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.82389162562 142% => OK
Total topic words: 21.0 14.657635468 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.