The following appeared on the Mozart School of Music Web site.
"The Mozart School of Music should be the first choice for parents considering enrolling their child in music lessons. First of all, the Mozart School welcomes youngsters at all ability and age levels; there is no audition to attend the school. Second, the school offers instruction in nearly all musical instruments as well a wide range of styles and genres from classical to rock. Third, the faculty includes some of the most distinguished musicians in the area. Finally, many Mozart graduates have gone on to become well-known and highly paid professional musicians."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The author argues that The Mozart School of Music should be the first choice among the parents for their children who are willing to pursue music. In building up to his claim, the author makes a lot of stated and unstated assumptions, which prove unwarranted in most cases, implying that the argument should be evaluated on the grounds of evidences before it to have any persuasiveness and credibility.
Firstly, the mere welcoming nature of the school to all age and ability groups, even that too without audition, doesn't warrant that the parents would be leaning towards the school as their first choice music school for their children. It may be possible that the parents may, rather, be tempted towards thinking other schools that provide limited scholarships or admits as the "Elite schools" and not the ones that are welcoming to all kinds of students, regardless of age and abilities. The parents may, instead, take these schools for granted because of no competition or whatsoever.
Secondly, the author's claim that the availability of a wide range of styles and genres would make the school the first-choice, which is again flawed. There is always a possibility, even in the strictest sense, that the quality of the education being offered at the school is being compromised because of the variety of genres and styles being offered. A school with just a few genres and styles would be more tempting to the parents whose children are aiming for a specific genre or style. For example, for a parent, whose child is willing to pursue Reggae style would be inclined to a music school which offers just this, rather than a school with a variety of choices.
Thirdly, the mere fact that the graduates of this school are, in general, successful in the professional arena doesn't warrant that the students whoever gets enrolled in the school will be successful in the future. Again, this piece of evidence doesn't confirm that the school is offering a quality education. For parents who are seeking for good quality education and are not influenced by just these, maybe, institution-hyped facts, these do not amount to any persuasion to them.
To sum up, the argument presented above is rife with assumptions. The assumptions, stated or unstated, do not contribute much to the persuasiveness of the claim made by the author. Unless these assumptions are warranted, the argument made by the author that The Mozart School of Music should be the first-choice school for parents just lacks meat.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 7 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 420 350
No. of Characters: 2026 1500
No. of Different Words: 187 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.527 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.824 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.623 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 152 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 101 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 59 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 36 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.529 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.374 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.631 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.125 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, for example, in general, in most cases, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 13.6137724551 147% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2104.0 2260.96107784 93% => OK
No of words: 418.0 441.139720559 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03349282297 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74511914645 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.473684210526 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 629.1 705.55239521 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 22.8473053892 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.6990660429 57.8364921388 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.266666667 119.503703932 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.8666666667 23.324526521 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.8 5.70786347227 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.425013733074 0.218282227539 195% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.154908460477 0.0743258471296 208% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.143536469508 0.0701772020484 205% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.245079308696 0.128457276422 191% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0783700720226 0.0628817314937 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 14.3799401198 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 48.3550499002 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 12.197005988 103% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 98.500998004 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 12.3882235529 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.1389221557 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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