The following appeared in a note from a sedan owner to a friend Of the two top brands of cars introduced in past year Kia cars are clearly more superior to the competing Alfa cars Kia cars boast aesthetically pleasing design and a fuel economy of 50 kms p

The author of this argument strongly recommends his friend that he should buy a Kia car rather than buying Alfa car based on his personal experience. His reasoning is that he has driven cars of both brands. But, he has reached an optimistic conclusion that whatever his experience was in driving both of the cars, others will have the same experience. Jumping to a conclusion which is completely based on personal assumption should not be considered valid or true.

The author states that Kia cars are more superior than Alfa cars as Kia cars boast aesthetic design and are fuel efficient. But, he has not considered performance metrics of Alfa cars. Also, he has not provided any proofs of surveys which can support his claim of Kia cars being superior. Hence, he has done nothing but assumed that Kia cars are superior.

An important point to consider is that brands have cars of different variants and models each having variable specifications and performance metrics. Any brand does not sell just a single model. It may be possible that the author is comparing a Kia car of higher variant to Alfa car of lower variant. Thus, the comparison made by him is not valid at all. The comparison he has made is like comparing a giant with an ant. Hence, the author's assumption should not be considered as true.

The author states that 8000 Kia cars were sold in the past quarter. But, he does not mention any number of how many Alfa cars were sold during the same quarter. The number of Alfa cars sold can be greater than 8000. He has not provided any proofs to support this statement of his as well. Also, having an economy of 50 kms per litre may not be cosidered great by other drivers.

The author claims that Alfa cars received only a few positive reviews regarding their overall performance. Again, he has not provided any proofs or reviews which can support his claim. It should be considered that Kia cars might have not received even a single positive review. By stating that 8000 Kia cars were sold does not mean that Kia cars are clearly more superior. The author considers Kia cars to be cost-effective. This can be due to his good financial savings and budget in which the Kia cars fit. But, the author has not considered that not everyone will have the same budget like him.

The author has made baseless assumptions by considering his own experience and reviews. But, he has not provided any evidences to support any of his claims. He has done nothing but stated that his experience his valid for everyone else who wants to purchase a new car. Any of his claims cannot be considered as valid or true.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 37, Rule ID: SUPERIOR_THAN[2]
Message: The adjective more is normally used with to and does not need 'more' (so called implicit comparative). Probably you need to write: 'superior to'.
Suggestion: superior to
... The author states that Kia cars are more superior than Alfa cars as Kia cars boast aesthetic d...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 433, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...mparing a giant with an ant. Hence, the authors assumption should not be considered as ...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, may, regarding, so, thus, well

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 13.6137724551 140% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 28.8173652695 163% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 55.5748502994 72% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2164.0 2260.96107784 96% => OK
No of words: 464.0 441.139720559 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66379310345 5.12650576532 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64119157421 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46931224689 2.78398813304 89% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 204.123752495 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.411637931034 0.468620217663 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 659.7 705.55239521 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 4.96107784431 262% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 19.7664670659 152% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.8473053892 66% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.917046107 57.8364921388 50% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 72.1333333333 119.503703932 60% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.4666666667 23.324526521 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.73333333333 5.70786347227 30% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.20758483034 171% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.321631285637 0.218282227539 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110056710913 0.0743258471296 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.126628143017 0.0701772020484 180% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.207954837482 0.128457276422 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.120963194759 0.0628817314937 192% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.3 14.3799401198 58% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 48.3550499002 151% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 12.197005988 56% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 9.45 12.5979740519 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.97 8.32208582834 84% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 98.500998004 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.1389221557 72% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 11.9071856287 59% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 30 15
No. of Words: 464 350
No. of Characters: 2103 1500
No. of Different Words: 184 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.641 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.532 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.417 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 136 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 94 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 66 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 15.467 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.638 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.467 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.346 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.529 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.208 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5