The following is a letter to the head of the tourism bureau on the island of Tria. "Erosion of beach sand along the shores of Tria Island is a serious threat to our island and our tourist industry. In order to stop the erosion, we should charge people for using the beaches. Although this solution may annoy a few tourists in the short term, it will raise money for replenishing the sand. Replenishing the sand, as was done to protect buildings on the nearby island of Batia, will help protect buildings along our shores, thereby reducing these buildings' risk of additional damage from severe storms. And since beaches and buildings in the area will be preserved, Tria's tourist industry will improve over the long term."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
In the very first statement of the letter the issue of sand erosion along beach shore is mentioned. The sender however has also suggested a suggestion, provided a reason for that suggestion derived a conclusion. However, many important questions and doubts are still unanswered after evaluating the letter send to the tourism bureau.
To begin with, no information in regards to erosion was provided. At what rate is the erosion damaging beaches? What are the prime reasons for it? Estimate of damage caused? Nothing, no background knowledge is provided here. One might even question that is the issue worth raising due to lack of valid reasons.
If we consider that maybe, the issue is of grave importance, is the solution valid? The writer suggests that imposing of charges on usage of beaches as a solution. No insights were subjected here. It said it would help in raising money for the aforementioned cause and prove to be beneficial in future, but it was just an assumption with no grounds to establish it's position. What if annoyed by the charges, tourist shift there destined location? Is it worth the risk? And if it is worth the risk then numbers, financial experts, analytics, evidences, past experiences, future consequences should have been present.
Next, the money supposed to be collected would be used in filling up the sand and this in return would preserve the beaches and buildings of the local area. Again, just a plethora of assumptions and no evidence. Would it have a reverse ecological effect? Statistics and analytics to guarantee positive outcome and lesser erosion? Financial reasons to consider the solution? Success status of 'replenishing of sand' project in islands of Batia? Frequency of 'severe storms' and their effects on local buildings? Again, there is an absences of reasoning and no reliable information is provided.
The sender of the letter has reached conclusions based on vague thinking. Maybe it is the most apt solution for the alarming erosions in island of Tria but the letter does not help in making a strong argument for it. For a topic which concerns tourism, economy and ecology - theories don't work as one needs solid reasons to undertake major implications.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 10 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 27 15
No. of Words: 366 350
No. of Characters: 1794 1500
No. of Different Words: 211 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.374 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.902 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.655 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 134 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 110 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 72 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 13.556 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.445 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.333 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.224 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.224 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.044 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 31, Rule ID: IN_REGARD_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'regarding' or 'with regard to'.
Suggestion: regarding; with regard to
... bureau. To begin with, no information in regards to erosion was provided. At what rate is t...
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Line 3, column 292, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...tioned cause and prove to be beneficial in future, but it was just an assumption with no ...
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Line 3, column 552, Rule ID: PAST_EXPERIENCE_MEMORY[1]
Message: Use simply 'experiences'.
Suggestion: experiences
...inancial experts, analytics, evidences, past experiences, future consequences should have been p...
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Line 4, column 514, Rule ID: THERE_S_MANY[4]
Message: Did you mean 'there are an absences'?
Suggestion: there are an absences
...heir effects on local buildings? Again, there is an absences of reasoning and no reliable informatio...
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Line 4, column 523, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'an absence' or simply 'absences'?
Suggestion: an absence; absences
...cts on local buildings? Again, there is an absences of reasoning and no reliable informatio...
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Line 5, column 284, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...tourism, economy and ecology - theories dont work as one needs solid reasons to unde...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, still, then, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 55.5748502994 83% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1846.0 2260.96107784 82% => OK
No of words: 365.0 441.139720559 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05753424658 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7598928548 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 204.123752495 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58904109589 0.468620217663 126% => OK
syllable_count: 577.8 705.55239521 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 19.7664670659 137% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 22.8473053892 57% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.7267550266 57.8364921388 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 68.3703703704 119.503703932 57% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 13.5185185185 23.324526521 58% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 2.44444444444 5.70786347227 43% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 15.0 6.88822355289 218% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205670961041 0.218282227539 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0443151828388 0.0743258471296 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0595138853973 0.0701772020484 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110375489464 0.128457276422 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0509100239517 0.0628817314937 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 14.3799401198 64% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.28 48.3550499002 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 12.197005988 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.48 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.21 8.32208582834 111% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 98.500998004 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 12.3882235529 40% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 11.1389221557 65% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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