School cafeteria has been changed from high fat food provider to low fat food provider. It may seems that student are not happy with decision and parent demanding to change vendor again.
School has taken decision to change vendor because of health concern of student which might goes worst because of serving high fat food.But,even if student doesn't like decision it has an good purpose. Here mentioned that ; this causing student to bring there own food which has been more damaging. Here it is not mentioned that what mean by there own food. It is food from home or from some restaurant or hotels.Even if we consider own food means food from home and as it is stated it will cause health issue,then there is also possibilities that student are having same food for dinner also and which is not health. Then even if we try to maintain healthy food at school ultimately student are having unhealthy food at home.For another case that if own food means food from outside like restaurant and hotel. It is primary job of parent to focus on healthy diet of student.
Parents suggested to change vendor to another,but does another vendor can provide tastier low fat food? and if not there is no point to change vendor. Then if we consider to bring high fat food provider then again it will cause health damage.It is practical approach to keep vendor continue,because children might not concern about there health and they are not aware of good food choices.In such case rather than changing vendor,school and parent should be more focus on creating awareness about healthy food. Also it might be that,due to breaking regular habit of food student are not enjoying food.In such case after certain time period student can be familiarised with food and then they might start enjoying food.
Considering all above things in mind it is clear that changing vendor may not always provide and enjoyable food. Rather care should be taken by parent to provide healthy food for children.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: It may seems that student are not happy with decision and parent demanding to change vendor again.
Description: A modal auxillary is not usually followed by a verb, present tense, 3rd person singular
Suggestion: Refer to may and seems
Sentence: School has taken decision to change vendor because of health concern of student which might goes worst because of serving high fat food.But,even if student doesn't like decision it has an good purpose.
Description: A modal auxillary is not usually followed by a verb, present tense, 3rd person singular
Suggestion: Refer to might and goes
Sentence: Here mentioned that ; this causing student to bring there own food which has been more damaging.
Description: The fragment student to bring is not usually followed by there
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace there with their
Sentence: Then if we consider to bring high fat food provider then again it will cause health damage.It is practical approach to keep vendor continue,because children might not concern about there health and they are not aware of good food choices.In such case rather than changing vendor,school and parent should be more focus on creating awareness about healthy food.
Description: The fragment vendor continue , is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace continue with verb, past tense
Description: An existential there is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to there and health
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.0 out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 351 350
No. of Characters: 1604 1500
No. of Different Words: 151 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.328 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.57 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.112 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 108 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 70 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 35 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 15 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 15.267 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.615 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.435 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.614 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.214 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 137, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: But
... worst because of serving high fat food.But,even if student doesnt like decision it...
^^^
Line 3, column 140, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , even
...rst because of serving high fat food.But,even if student doesnt like decision it has ...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 157, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...rving high fat food.But,even if student doesnt like decision it has an good purpose. H...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 185, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
... if student doesnt like decision it has an good purpose. Here mentioned that ; thi...
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Line 3, column 254, Rule ID: THERE_OWN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'their own'?
Suggestion: their own
...ed that ; this causing student to bring there own food which has been more damaging. Here...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 342, Rule ID: THERE_OWN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'their own'?
Suggestion: their own
...e it is not mentioned that what mean by there own food. It is food from home or from some...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 413, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Even
... home or from some restaurant or hotels.Even if we consider own food means food from...
^^^^
Line 3, column 509, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , then
... it is stated it will cause health issue,then there is also possibilities that studen...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 726, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: For
...udent are having unhealthy food at home.For another case that if own food means foo...
^^^
Line 5, column 46, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , but
...ts suggested to change vendor to another,but does another vendor can provide tastier...
^^^^
Line 5, column 105, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: And
...endor can provide tastier low fat food? and if not there is no point to change vend...
^^^
Line 5, column 163, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[3]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'consider bringing'.
Suggestion: consider bringing
...s no point to change vendor. Then if we consider to bring high fat food provider then again it wi...
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Line 5, column 243, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: It
... then again it will cause health damage.It is practical approach to keep vendor co...
^^
Line 5, column 291, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , because
...actical approach to keep vendor continue,because children might not concern about there ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 390, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: In
...they are not aware of good food choices.In such case rather than changing vendor,s...
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Line 5, column 430, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , school
...In such case rather than changing vendor,school and parent should be more focus on crea...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 512, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
... creating awareness about healthy food. Also it might be that,due to breaking regul...
^^^^
Line 5, column 533, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , due
...bout healthy food. Also it might be that,due to breaking regular habit of food stud...
^^^^
Line 5, column 540, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...althy food. Also it might be that,due to breaking regular habit of food student a...
^^
Line 5, column 603, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: In
...t of food student are not enjoying food.In such case after certain time period stu...
^^
Line 7, column 114, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Rather,
... not always provide and enjoyable food. Rather care should be taken by parent to provi...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, then
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 55.5748502994 79% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 16.3942115768 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1645.0 2260.96107784 73% => OK
No of words: 338.0 441.139720559 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86686390533 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42158277559 2.78398813304 87% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 204.123752495 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.455621301775 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 489.6 705.55239521 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 0.0 8.76447105788 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 87.5346287162 57.8364921388 151% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.5 119.503703932 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1428571429 23.324526521 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.0 5.70786347227 35% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 21.0 5.25449101796 400% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.137125430648 0.218282227539 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0693915864644 0.0743258471296 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0523139989367 0.0701772020484 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111123276266 0.128457276422 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0627524575092 0.0628817314937 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.3799401198 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 48.3550499002 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.49 8.32208582834 90% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 98.500998004 58% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.