Kensington Academy has given management contract of its cafeteria to Swift Nutrition. This company has introduced low-calorie,low-fat meals.A parent is arguing that his son any many of his friends donot like this meal and so will prefer to bring there own lunch which will be less healthy and will be detrimental for health of the students. There are some questions that needs to answered before any decision is taken.
Firstly, do all students find food of Swift Nutrition bad? It's possible that the child and his friends donot like food while other students may not have any problem with new menu. Food taste is subjective, one may like it while other may not. It is not possible for school to satisfy each and every student. Parents must understand this and must encourage there children to eat healthy food that is being offered in the cafeteria.
Secondly, it seems far fetched that food that children will bring from home will cause serious health consequence. Why would parents send unhealthy food to school? If school apprises all parents, about the decision it has taken to serve healthy food then parents will be understanding and will infact tell their children to eat healthy.
Thirdly, is it not possible to make low fat, low-calorie food that taste's better? Swift Nutrition may change the receipe so that more students like the taste of food that they are eating. Not all low calorie, low fat food tastes bad!
Lastly, how will students start eating healthy if Swift Nutrition is replaced by some other company that serves unhelthy food? Parent suggests to remove Swift Nutrition from service but this will not solve the problem. If some other comapny serves same kind of healthy food, it seems unlikely that students will like it. On other hand, if company makes food to the liking of students is does not change the fact that children are eating less healthy food.
The principal must decide weathter only few students don't like the food or majority of them, also, argument that children bring food from home is far fetched and needs some backing of facts. Principal must also consider option of changing receipe in order to make food taste better without compromising on nutrition and also think about how changing the management would do any good.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 387 350
No. of Characters: 1845 1500
No. of Different Words: 183 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.435 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.767 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.249 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 119 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 94 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 57 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 25 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.35 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.409 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.7 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.351 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.595 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.106 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 126, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , low-fat
... This company has introduced low-calorie,low-fat meals.A parent is arguing that his son ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 141, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: A
...as introduced low-calorie,low-fat meals.A parent is arguing that his son any many...
^
Line 1, column 247, Rule ID: THERE_OWN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'their own'?
Suggestion: their own
...e this meal and so will prefer to bring there own lunch which will be less healthy and wi...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 269, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...to serve healthy food then parents will be understanding and will infact tell their children to ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 135, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'suggests removing'.
Suggestion: suggests removing
...mpany that serves unhelthy food? Parent suggests to remove Swift Nutrition from service but this w...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 11, column 54, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... must decide weathter only few students dont like the food or majority of them, also...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, lastly, may, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, while, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.9520958084 154% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 28.8173652695 111% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 55.5748502994 74% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1897.0 2260.96107784 84% => OK
No of words: 384.0 441.139720559 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94010416667 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38167094695 2.78398813304 86% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 204.123752495 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.481770833333 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 561.6 705.55239521 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.0421503701 57.8364921388 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.8421052632 119.503703932 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2105263158 23.324526521 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.36842105263 5.70786347227 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213327615685 0.218282227539 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0835012005819 0.0743258471296 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0647846864514 0.0701772020484 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123911943136 0.128457276422 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0519177001064 0.0628817314937 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 14.3799401198 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 98.500998004 72% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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