The author of the letter seems to be quite upset with the objections raised by non city members of the committee at the meeting. He states that in recent meeting important decisions were not taken and that the membership of the committee must be restricted to city members only. On a primary level this suggestion does seem convincing although further check reveals that the argument contains lots of unanswered questions which needs to be cleared to make it more convincing.
Firstly the author states that foolish objections were raised by members who are not residents of oak city. The author needs to clear what were the suggestions and objections raised by the members? It is possible that the objections that seem foolish to author are of great concern to the non residents of the city. For example there may have been a suggestion to dump the garbage of oak city at a particular site outside the residencial area of oak city. Although, the area is right in the middle of other residential areas and dumping garbage at that place will cause nuisance for the residents of that locality. Thus the author needs to provide what objections were raised at the meeting.
Secondly, the author needs to answer that whatever strategies are applied for the improvement of oak city does not affect the people and area outside the city. Decisions taken only by the members of city will be biased. The people coming from outside of the city to work in oak city might get adversely affected by their decisions. For example the city decides that only bicycles are allowed inside the city. It will be quite difficult for people coming from far away to adhere to this rule. They will have to park their vehicles outside the city gates. Which will raise more questions like will the outsiders be provided with appropriate parking space and security of their vehicles?
The author needs to provide answers to how non interference of non residents is going to help committee to make oak city better place to live and work. For example the decision making and execution are two different aspects. What if the decisions are taken in the meeting yet no progress is possible due to bad execution. They take decision of providing free wifi connection throughout the city. However they do not have manpower to execute their plan and to provide the routers in the whole city. Thus, it means that the improvement of city is hindered without interference of non resident members in the committee meetings.
Thus the author needs to provide answers to these questions to make the argument more convincing.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 9 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 442 350
No. of Characters: 2109 1500
No. of Different Words: 181 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.585 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.771 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.472 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 144 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 115 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 72 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 48 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.217 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.036 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.435 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.335 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.335 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.09 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 616, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...nce for the residents of that locality. Thus the author needs to provide what object...
^^^^
Line 4, column 396, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...ee wifi connection throughout the city. However they do not have manpower to execute th...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...ent members in the committee meetings. Thus the author needs to provide answers to ...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, thus, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 55.5748502994 130% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2147.0 2260.96107784 95% => OK
No of words: 442.0 441.139720559 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85746606335 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58517132086 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51703416458 2.78398813304 90% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 204.123752495 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.41628959276 0.468620217663 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 678.6 705.55239521 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.501963523 57.8364921388 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.347826087 119.503703932 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2173913043 23.324526521 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.70786347227 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23146000052 0.218282227539 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.078414531904 0.0743258471296 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0746907933193 0.0701772020484 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12770515823 0.128457276422 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.060960340659 0.0628817314937 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 14.3799401198 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.5979740519 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.51 8.32208582834 90% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 98.500998004 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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