The following is a memorandum from the business
manager of a television station.
“Over the past year, our late-night news program has
devoted increased time to national news and less time
to weather and local news. During this time period,
most of the complaints received from viewers were
concerned with our station’s coverage of weather and
local news. In addition, local businesses that used to
advertise during our late-night news program have just
canceled their advertising contracts with us. Therefore,
in order to attract more viewers to the program and to
avoid losing any further advertising revenues, we
should restore the time devoted to weather and local
news to its former level.”
It is stated in the memorandum presented by the manager that,the Weather forcast and Local news is being overshadowed by the national news program also the possible reasons for this consequence and measures to be taken in-order to restore the condition to its earlier format.The manager draws these conclusions based on three unwarrened assumptions which,if are not backed with enough evidence would weaken the argument.
Firstly,the complaints reagarding the coverage of weather and local news would not directly imply towards the importance of forcasting it on television for a longer duration.It could be fair possibility that,a certain region with turbulent weather would ask for a more frequent weather forcast.Similarly with local news,a region with not much miscreane happenig around would be more inclined towards watching national news than local news.The complaints might be from this region which has been assumped by the manager to be from a larger audience.
Secondly,the cancellation of advertisement contracts is being directly linked to the time devoted to local news.Where as,the possibility of local businesses adapting to a different and more effective way of advertising could be the case.This could be the reason behind the shift of local business advertisers,and if the possibility turns out to be true,conclusion made by the manager does not hold water.
Lastly, the manager claims that,restoring the program timings to the earlier pattern would attract more viewers,where as, this claim is not backed by enough evidence.It seems a fair possibility of lossing the existing audeince due to shift of program timings,moreover the audeince endulging in national news could be agitated and result in a bitter reputation of the new channel as a whole.
Although,the manager provides reasons to support his claims,perhaps they are not backed by strong material of evidence such a statistical data or regional survey.If the required is mentioned it would support the argument in the form of evidence ,in that case the argument made by the manager would hold water.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 5.0 out of 6
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 6 15
No. of Words: 345 350
No. of Characters: 1723 1500
No. of Different Words: 167 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.31 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.994 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.67 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 131 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 107 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 71 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 35 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 57.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 22.64 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.833 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.508 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.508 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.114 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, lastly, moreover, second, secondly, similarly, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 55.5748502994 83% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1761.0 2260.96107784 78% => OK
No of words: 323.0 441.139720559 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.4520123839 5.12650576532 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.11842633553 2.78398813304 112% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 204.123752495 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.526315789474 0.468620217663 112% => OK
syllable_count: 544.5 705.55239521 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 19.7664670659 25% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 64.0 22.8473053892 280% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 77.3837192179 57.8364921388 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 352.2 119.503703932 295% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 64.6 23.324526521 277% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 15.0 5.70786347227 263% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 28.0 5.25449101796 533% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234184198812 0.218282227539 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.133472969734 0.0743258471296 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0575576481775 0.0701772020484 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133472969734 0.128457276422 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0575576481775 0.0628817314937 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 36.5 14.3799401198 254% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -1.94 48.3550499002 -4% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 7.1628742515 204% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 29.4 12.197005988 241% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 15.22 12.5979740519 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.46 8.32208582834 138% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 98.500998004 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 28.5 12.3882235529 230% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 27.6 11.1389221557 248% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 29.0 11.9071856287 244% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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