The following is from a recent email by the diord corp. Human resources manager. "TObor technologies found that mental health problems and mental illness were responsible for about 15 percent of employee sick as they do for physical illness. In addition the company hired an on-site psychologist and created a system that allows workers to schedule confidential counselling appointments. After one year, the number of sick days used by employees declined by 10 percent. Diord corp has had an increase in employee sick days over the past two years, so we should introduce a similar insurance plan and counselling program. These measures will surely reduce employee absenteeism and cause and increase in productivity.
The argument that states by introducting a better insurance plan and counseling program is not entirely logically convincing, because it based simply on assumptions. In fact, the inaccurate reasons are based on three logical errors.
First, the argument assumes that Tobor Technologies are credential enough to firmly state they have found that mental health problems and mental illness were found in about 15% of employees being sick. However, this brings doubts about the company by considering have they been accredited for making this type of conclusion. The statement should have been provided with statiscal information to at least provide some degree of support. Additionally, the compant name includes “technologies.” This makes it automatically difficult to believe in their insight into the scientific community, specifically mental health problems. Furthermore, they seem like a company based around technology. Thus, because they lack credibiltiy in the field of psychiatrics, they are not to be deemed worthy to find that 15% of employees have been sick.
Moreoever, the argument addresses the company hired an on-site psychologist and created a system that allows workers to scheudle confidential counseling appointments. From a reader’s perspective, maybe the psychologist is validates; however, it does not validate the fact that the confidential counseling appointments have been actually tested out prior to using it on the employees. Thus, how can they assume it is actually helping the employees. One can easily assume the employees felt better if they were alleviated from the stress followed from work by having some amount of time, such as 2 to 3 hours away from it. Because the passage never shows scientific validation that proves the confidential counseling appointments have gone through research trials, it is inaccurate to say that the confidential counseling appointments were crucial in decreasing the number of sick days.
Mentioned as a second idea like the confidential counseling appointments stated above, the company also suggests a insurance plan that reiceves the same coverage for mental illness as they do for physical illness. Again, they do not bring in statsitcal and factual information that supports that the new insurance plan is benefiting the employees. It could have never been the fact that the insurance plan was the issue, and even if it had worked for 10% percent of the population, the rest of the 5% has to be considered as well. IF the new insurance is better, it questions why have not the other 5% improved in reports of employees calling in sick. Furthermore, because the statistics in imporved employee absentee is 10% out of 15% it is false to claim the company should introduce a similar insurance plan and couseling program.
This analogical arugment is not completely sound due to the lack of evidence or so called assumptions that surrounds the conclusion. The most signifcant flaw about the conclusion the company has made is there ck of scientific and statistical evidence. They have not shown prior trials in using the metod of confidential counseling appointmetns nor have they explained if tobor technologies is even considered accredited to conclude a certain percentage of mental illnesses. From the name including “technologies” it is automaticall conveyed as a technoloical company. In addition, because only 10 out of 15 % were well off from the couslein system and new insurance plan, the evidence is not enough to introduce a similar insurance plan and couseling program to the company in consideration of the employees health. These three arguments further concludes the inaccuracy in their findings that they most possiblt assume wil reduce employee absenteeism and increase productivity.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 590 350
No. of Characters: 3113 1500
No. of Different Words: 273 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.928 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.276 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.993 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 234 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 188 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 144 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 108 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.6 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.483 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.64 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.275 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.476 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.055 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 114, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...stated above, the company also suggests a insurance plan that reiceves the same c...
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Line 9, column 610, Rule ID: WERE_VBB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'where' or 'we'?
Suggestion: where; we
...n addition, because only 10 out of 15 % were well off from the couslein system and n...
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Line 9, column 799, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'employees'' or 'employee's'?
Suggestion: employees'; employee's
... to the company in consideration of the employees health. These three arguments further c...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, furthermore, however, if, may, second, so, thus, well, as to, at least, in addition, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.6327345309 148% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 28.8173652695 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 55.5748502994 130% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 16.3942115768 134% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3202.0 2260.96107784 142% => OK
No of words: 590.0 441.139720559 134% => OK
Chars per words: 5.42711864407 5.12650576532 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.92848004997 4.56307096286 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12845878801 2.78398813304 112% => OK
Unique words: 284.0 204.123752495 139% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.481355932203 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 975.6 705.55239521 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 4.96107784431 222% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.9776311836 57.8364921388 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.416666667 119.503703932 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5833333333 23.324526521 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.16666666667 5.70786347227 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 6.88822355289 189% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248585789804 0.218282227539 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0675760633031 0.0743258471296 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0851026628129 0.0701772020484 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130465982709 0.128457276422 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0888903159408 0.0628817314937 141% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 14.3799401198 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 48.3550499002 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.51 12.5979740519 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.32208582834 107% => OK
difficult_words: 152.0 98.500998004 154% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.