It might seem logical at the first glance to agree with the author's argument in which the proposed C-Note jazz club would make a profit as a result of the lack of competition because jazz is quite popular in Monroe. The author of this argument on what might be less credible and even unproven assumption to support his/her claim that I will distinguish them below.
To begin with, the argument relies on a weak analogy. The author assumes that since the nearest jazz club is far from Monroe that its fans would prefer to go to the proposed club, and therefore it would dominate the local market. One problem regarding this claim is that the author does not consider the quality of services provided in clubs. What if the club already in existence offers services more affordable or employs more professional waiters? What if the quality of broadcasting the music is far more better in the old one? In this case, fans might prefer to drive longer to get there. Hence, to strengthen his/her argument, the author should benefit from answering these type of questions to authenticate the argument.
One more problem with the argument involves that the author notes that approximately 100,000 attendance was gathered in the annual jazz festival, therefore jazz is completely popular. the author has not accounted for the possibility that those people had nothing better to do at that time than attend a jazz festival or they just tended to try it on and eventually disliked it. Whether attendances were local residents or tourists? these statistics should be completely clear at the given data to make the argument valid and reliable.
Lastly, the other problematic claim is that the author mentions that annually around 1000 dollars have been spent on jazz entertainment by its fans. The point is that people in this town may spend thousands dollars more on other entertainments and that is why it is highly likely that this spending does not make the business tremendously profitable. Importantly, we are not informed about the cost of opening and maintenance of a jazz club. We just do not know. Unless the argument is fully valid and reliable to effectively back.
To recapitulate, despite the argument suffering from several problems and is unconvincing, we can not absolutely rely on it or refuse it without pursuing any additional assumption and reasoning. the author can strengthen his/her assertion by changing states referred to the mentioned solutions. Without these changes, the argument is implausible and the reasoning is faulty.
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- A jazz music club in Monroe would be a tremendously profitable enterprise Currently the nearest jazz club is 65 miles away thus the proposed new jazz club in Monroe the C Note would have the local market all to itself Plus jazz is extremely popular in Mon 30
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 9 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 424 350
No. of Characters: 2080 1500
No. of Different Words: 219 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.538 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.906 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.68 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 147 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 110 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 83 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 46 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.556 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 14.119 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.556 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.315 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.315 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.121 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 61, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...l at the first glance to agree with the authors argument in which the proposed C-Note j...
^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 505, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'better' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: better
...uality of broadcasting the music is far more better in the old one? In this case, fans migh...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 184, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
..., therefore jazz is completely popular. the author has not accounted for the possib...
^^^
Line 3, column 432, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: These
...ances were local residents or tourists? these statistics should be completely clear a...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 195, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...ny additional assumption and reasoning. the author can strengthen his/her assertion...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, if, lastly, may, regarding, so, then, therefore, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 28.8173652695 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 55.5748502994 101% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2124.0 2260.96107784 94% => OK
No of words: 421.0 441.139720559 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04513064133 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73917979339 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 204.123752495 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529691211401 0.468620217663 113% => OK
syllable_count: 660.6 705.55239521 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.8323535298 57.8364921388 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.142857143 119.503703932 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0476190476 23.324526521 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.2380952381 5.70786347227 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151972207246 0.218282227539 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0401640895601 0.0743258471296 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0593954862351 0.0701772020484 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0821821261752 0.128457276422 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0431761366712 0.0628817314937 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 98.500998004 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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