The following was written as a part of an application for a small-business loan by a group of developers in the city of Monroe.
"A jazz music club in Monroe would be a tremendously profitable enterprise.
Currently, the nearest jazz club is 65 miles away; thus, the proposed new jazz club in Monroe, the C-Note, would have the local market all to itself. Plus, jazz is extremely popular in Monroe: over 100,000 people attended Monroe's annual jazz festival last summer; several well-known jazz musicians live in Monroe; and the highest-rated radio program in Monroe is 'Jazz Nightly,' which airs every weeknight at 7 P.M. Finally, a nationwide study indicates that the typical jazz fan spends close to $1,000 per year on jazz entertainment."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The following argument, which says that the jazz music club in Monroe would become an extremely profitable eneterprise in based on a lot of assumptions and considerations.
The argument states that the nearest jazz club, C-Note is 65 miles away and the local market will be wholly captured by this jazz club. The statement assumes that C-Note is the only jazz club in Monroe. There can be many jazz clubs in Monroe other than C-Note which are as good as C-Note and there can be a certain set of people who like those jazz clubs. The statement also assumes the fact that all the people of Monroe have a liking for jazz music, there can be a bunch of music lovers who love music of different genres like classical, rap, pop and so on.
The argument further states that jazz is extremely popular in Monroe on the basis of the fact that 100,000 people attended the Monroe's annual jazz festival. Here, unless and until the reader is not known to exact population of Monroe, the number 100,000 cannot be considered as a huge number. The argument also states that several well known jazz musicians stay in Monroe. This statement doesn't clearly justify the popularity of Jazz in Monroe, as Monroe can be a place where the jazz musicians find it cheap to stay or there can be various resources in Monroe where they can practice their instruments better than other places. Also, the word 'several' is a generalized word and doesn't justify the exact number.
Further the argument says that the 'Jazz Nightly' is the highest rated radio show in Monroe. Here, it is assumed that the rating given to the radio show is given by each and every person in Monroe. It can be the case only the jazz lovers in Monroe have given the rating to the show and the non jazz lovers didn't bother giving a rating to the show. This doesn't clearly state the extent to which people in Monroe love jazz.
The argument concludes by stating that the nationwide survey says that jazz fans spend $1000 dollar a year in jazz entertainment. Here, the survey is done nation wide and is not specific to Monroe. There can be the case there is a majority of jazz lovers outside Monroe who love jazz as compared to that in Monroe. Also, the argument haven't specified the average spending of a jazz lover in jazz enetertainment which makes the number $1000 questionable as to how big are small this number is.
Thus, the following argument is based on tons of assumptions and have fallen short of providing necessary details. Thus, it cannot be surely said that C-note will turn out to a profitable enterprise.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 461 350
No. of Characters: 2065 1500
No. of Different Words: 185 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.634 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.479 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.316 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 135 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 72 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 49 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 32 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.05 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.919 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.3 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.391 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.617 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.142 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 137, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...l be wholly captured by this jazz club. The statement assumes that C-Note is the on...
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Line 5, column 389, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...usicians stay in Monroe. This statement doesnt clearly justify the popularity of Jazz ...
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Line 5, column 679, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
... word several is a generalized word and doesnt justify the exact number. Further th...
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Line 7, column 305, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...ing to the show and the non jazz lovers didnt bother giving a rating to the show. Thi...
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Line 7, column 352, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...other giving a rating to the show. This doesnt clearly state the extent to which peopl...
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Line 9, column 92, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'dollar' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'dollars'.
Suggestion: dollars
...de survey says that jazz fans spend 000 dollar a year in jazz entertainment. Here, the...
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Line 9, column 154, Rule ID: NATION_WIDE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'nationwide'?
Suggestion: nationwide
...entertainment. Here, the survey is done nation wide and is not specific to Monroe. There ca...
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Line 9, column 333, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: haven't
...d to that in Monroe. Also, the argument havent specified the average spending of a jaz...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, thus, well, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 13.6137724551 162% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2116.0 2260.96107784 94% => OK
No of words: 456.0 441.139720559 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64035087719 5.12650576532 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62105577807 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35721847027 2.78398813304 85% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 204.123752495 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.414473684211 0.468620217663 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 654.3 705.55239521 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.5637725059 57.8364921388 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.8 119.503703932 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8 23.324526521 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.55 5.70786347227 27% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.319384496896 0.218282227539 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111674208007 0.0743258471296 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0829496953639 0.0701772020484 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.185709699739 0.128457276422 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0795705814796 0.0628817314937 127% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 14.3799401198 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 48.3550499002 137% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.93 12.5979740519 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.08 8.32208582834 85% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 98.500998004 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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