Fossil evidence indicates that the blompus-an extremely large, carnivorous land mammal-inhabited the continent of Pentagoria for tens of thousands of years until its sudden decline and ultimate extinction about twelve thousand years ago. Scientists have determined that the extinction coincided with a period of significant climate change and with the arrival of the first humans. Some scholars theorize that the climate change so altered the distribution of plants and animals in the environment that the food chain upon which the blompus depended was irretrievably disrupted. Others contend that predation by humans is the more plausible explanation for the rapid population decline.
The extinction of the carnivore blompus occurred due to the precipitous changes in the climatic conditions as well as due to the arrival of the first human species on the plant and their predation, as the argument avers. There are several fallacies in the argument, and is not logically convincing as it ignores a number of certain crucial assumptions.
Firstly, it is assumed that the sudden decline was due to climatic changes and human predation which are undoubtedly the most mundane and broad reasons behind the extinction of several animal species. There has to be a more appropriate and precise reason behind the disappearance of any animal on earth. Alterations in the weather and hunting of animals have been ongoing since a long period and although many animals became endangered in this process, there are several species which are still extant.
Additionally, after the prevalence of first humans, it cannot be reckoned that humans solely hunted carnivores such as Blompus, for their food or to protect themselves from it’s attack. It is obvious that the homo sapiens must have had plants and other easily edible options to buttress their survival. Moreover, other species also must have been under scrutiny and would have suffered in a similar manner.
It is also clear that hunting required specialised tools and equipments and the human race must have taken a lot of of time and endurance in order to develop weapons for hunting. Especially for large carnivores like Blompus. Therefore, surmising the extinction of the animal due to predation by humans is not a pragmatic approach.
Hence, to recapitulate and further submit my stance, the rationale to conclude the extinction of a species should be done comparatively intense and scrupulous manner rather than assuming hackneyed reasonings like climatic change and predation.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 297 350
No. of Characters: 1518 1500
No. of Different Words: 164 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.151 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.111 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.705 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 123 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 95 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 55 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 38 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.75 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.175 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.346 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.642 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.059 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 392, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a similar manner" with adverb for "similar"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... under scrutiny and would have suffered in a similar manner. It is also clear that hunting requ...
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Line 7, column 40, Rule ID: NEEDS_FIXED[1]
Message: "required specialised" is only accepted in certain dialects. For something more widely acceptable, try 'specialising' or 'to be specialised'.
Suggestion: specialising; to be specialised
... It is also clear that hunting required specialised tools and equipments and the human race...
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Line 7, column 114, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: of
...nd the human race must have taken a lot of of time and endurance in order to develop ...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, moreover, so, still, therefore, well, as to, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 55.5748502994 68% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1566.0 2260.96107784 69% => OK
No of words: 297.0 441.139720559 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27272727273 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7891512898 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 204.123752495 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.569023569024 0.468620217663 121% => OK
syllable_count: 497.7 705.55239521 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.5448496585 57.8364921388 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.5 119.503703932 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.75 23.324526521 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.16666666667 5.70786347227 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0982858276175 0.218282227539 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0399515730199 0.0743258471296 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0329095381343 0.0701772020484 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0539050755204 0.128457276422 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0254595153179 0.0628817314937 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 14.3799401198 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 48.3550499002 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.5979740519 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.66 8.32208582834 116% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 98.500998004 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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