An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The author recommends that the government of Tagus should promote a new type of millet to fight against vitamin A deficiency among people of Tagus. The author offers two pieces of evidence to support the argument. First, the new breed of millet has high vitamin A content. Secondly, millet is already a staple food in Tagus thus they will easily embrace the new variety. However, the argument makes several assumptions which if don't hold would render the argument invalid. In the rest of this essay, the assumptions and the question that needs to be answered to evaluate the argument are discussed.
The most important flaw in the argument has to do with the assumption that people will accept this new breed of millet. The author mentions that the new breed cost more. We need to know how much more it cost as compared to the commonly used millet. In other words, Is it affordable? Maybe the cost of the new millet is so high that majority of residents of Tagus are not able to purchase the product in the first place. If that happens, the argument would be invalid and the plan to fight against Vitamin A deficiency by introducing the new breed of millet may turn out to be a complete failure.
Another question that needs to be answered is, Is the new millet similar to commonly used millet in every aspect except vitamin A levels? Perhaps, the taste of the new millet is too bad or perhaps it difficult to cook the new type of millet? Moreover, Is there any incentive for farmers to grow it?
We have to rule out these possibilities before we can convincingly say that people will most likely accept the millet and can derive benefit from it.
Finally, the author needs to present some data on the safety aspect of consuming the new millet. Perhaps, in the attempts to increase the vitamin A levels in the millet, the engineers might have disturbed the natural functioning of millet seeds, which may prove to be detrimental to health or worse, it may cost lives. We don't know. The question that needs to be answered is, Has any thorough analysis of the side effects of the new millet been performed to predict that it will be as healthy as any other millet? Without a complete knowledge about the safety aspects of the millet, it's nonsensical to promote this new type of millet.
In sum, the author needs to present more data regarding the cost of the new millet, it's similarity with the normal millet in terms of taste, appearance, and ease of cooking. Further, we need to be convinced that the new millet won't be any harmful side-effects. For this, we need to scientifically observe the product on its effects on the human body for some years. Without all this investigation, the government could make a big blunder in promoting and allowing the use of this new type of millet.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- need to compare the subsidies to the cost.
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- Need to argue against the conclusion always. For this topic it is:
To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 497 350
No. of Characters: 2242 1500
No. of Different Words: 211 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.722 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.511 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.435 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 158 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 107 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 62 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 33 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.88 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.557 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.4 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.346 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.524 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.13 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 426, Rule ID: IF_IS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'is'?
Suggestion: is
...rgument makes several assumptions which if dont hold would render the argument inv...
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Line 1, column 429, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ment makes several assumptions which if dont hold would render the argument invalid....
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Line 5, column 129, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'A level' or simply 'levels'?
Suggestion: A level; Levels
...d millet in every aspect except vitamin A levels? Perhaps, the taste of the new millet i...
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Line 8, column 147, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'A level' or simply 'levels'?
Suggestion: A level; Levels
...in the attempts to increase the vitamin A levels in the millet, the engineers might have...
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Line 8, column 323, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... health or worse, it may cost lives. We dont know. The question that needs to be ans...
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Line 8, column 636, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...cal to promote this new type of millet. In sum, the author needs to present more...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, may, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, thus, as to, in other words, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 78.0 55.5748502994 140% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2303.0 2260.96107784 102% => OK
No of words: 494.0 441.139720559 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66194331984 5.12650576532 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71445763274 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51139855849 2.78398813304 90% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 204.123752495 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.435222672065 0.468620217663 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 723.6 705.55239521 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 14.0 8.76447105788 160% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.7767813616 57.8364921388 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.12 119.503703932 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.76 23.324526521 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.96 5.70786347227 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.20758483034 183% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.463697309429 0.218282227539 212% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.14757943127 0.0743258471296 199% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0950854241582 0.0701772020484 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.270836931633 0.128457276422 211% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0980053298668 0.0628817314937 156% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 14.3799401198 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 12.5979740519 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 98.500998004 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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