An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet
While may be true that, the people of Tagus has deficiency of Vitamin A but the author's argument about government implementing the planting of millet doesn't make a cogent case. This argument is rife with holes and assumptions. so, the proper investigation is warranted.
Firstly, author didn't tell about the fertility of land that can help grow such type of new breed millet. What if government purchase the seeds and is not able to harvest the plant? Such condition will bring distress to the farmers that are caught with deficiency of vitamin A. Proper investigations of the land should be done before planting such seeds. The climate and environment also may not be favourable to grow. Hence, proper investigating regarding the feasibility of the lands in Tagus should be done by the government agencies or International organization.
Secondly, Let's take another case in which purchasing such new breed of millet is really expensive than the pills that could be economically viable to those persons. In such condition, to obliterate such deficiency, pills will better serve than raising and harvesting the new breed of millet. Government should have to mantain it's check regarding the investment that it could make in such breed. Without having the such documentational validity, one cannot tell that growing such millet will counterattack what Tagus citizens are facing.
Thirdly, Another condition which may arise is that the peoples of Tagus are so conservative and they lack educational background. On such cases, their view may precludes the growth of another breed of millet. They might say that they have been growing their own traditional type of millet since long ages. Their parents and grandparents had been growing and they don't want to ruin their family heirarchy of plantation. On such case, government might face impediments of cultivating the new breed and peoples won't get necessary thing that will obliterate the deficiency of vitamin A.
To sum up, analyzing various factors and angles, the author's argument doesn't justify for the plantation of new breed of millet. Instead the above mentioned arguments will also have to be taken in account.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 355 350
No. of Characters: 1788 1500
No. of Different Words: 185 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.341 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.037 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.787 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 117 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 89 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 63 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 50 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.722 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.496 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.311 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.543 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.047 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 71, Rule ID: A_BUT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'a bit'?
Suggestion: A bit
...ople of Tagus has deficiency of Vitamin A but the authors argument about government i...
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Line 1, column 81, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...gus has deficiency of Vitamin A but the authors argument about government implementing ...
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Line 1, column 151, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ent implementing the planting of millet doesnt make a cogent case. This argument is ri...
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Line 1, column 228, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...ent is rife with holes and assumptions. so, the proper investigation is warranted....
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Line 3, column 17, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...gation is warranted. Firstly, author didnt tell about the fertility of land that c...
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Line 7, column 364, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... grandparents had been growing and they dont want to ruin their family heirarchy of ...
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Line 9, column 54, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...alyzing various factors and angles, the authors argument doesnt justify for the plantat...
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Line 9, column 71, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...actors and angles, the authors argument doesnt justify for the plantation of new breed...
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Line 9, column 129, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Instead,
... the plantation of new breed of millet. Instead the above mentioned arguments will also...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, may, really, regarding, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, while, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 55.5748502994 85% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1828.0 2260.96107784 81% => OK
No of words: 350.0 441.139720559 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22285714286 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82388645202 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 204.123752495 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.525714285714 0.468620217663 112% => OK
syllable_count: 550.8 705.55239521 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.9893406102 57.8364921388 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.4 119.503703932 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5 23.324526521 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.8 5.70786347227 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.28983867008 0.218282227539 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0858820447075 0.0743258471296 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0617023518133 0.0701772020484 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166179900781 0.128457276422 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0184958593184 0.0628817314937 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 14.3799401198 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.3550499002 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.7 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 98.500998004 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 12.3882235529 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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