An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
Vitamin A deficiency in Tagus is surveyed and to fight against this deficiency new breed of millet should to promoted is what the government of Tagus thinks.
The deficiency of vitamin A can be reduced by consuming various other types of food as well, which would be available at more reasonable rates then the new breed of millet. The survey of deficient people includes people with high incomes as well as low incomes. Farmers would be provided subsidies for farming the new breed but how will this new breed made available to them for intake is not stated.
Following this way to fight deficiency will help only the rich to get rich intake of vitamin A and poor to remain deficient.
Millet is already a staple food of Tagus, still there is deficiency of vitamin which states that subsidiary along with millet is required as well.Consuming of millet alone won't help grow vitamin A at a faster rate.
Rather then promoting millet only government can find an option for the costly millet so that even the poorer can try and increase there vitamin A percent.
Their might be few people in Tagus without deficiency as well, by carrying out a survey of their diet maybe a proper solution to eradicate the deficiency of Vitamin A might be reached and prove out to be a better solution over promotion of new breed of millet.
Thus, only promoting new breed of millet wont help much in reducing the deficiency of vitamin A and a proper survey is required for finding out this deficiency in people of Tagus.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 9 15
No. of Words: 267 350
No. of Characters: 1220 1500
No. of Different Words: 122 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.042 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.569 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.421 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 88 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 56 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 36 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 25 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 29.667 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.981 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.778 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.484 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.874 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.161 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 7 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 144, Rule ID: LESS_MORE_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'than'?
Suggestion: than
...d be available at more reasonable rates then the new breed of millet. The survey of ...
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Line 11, column 147, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Consuming
...y along with millet is required as well.Consuming of millet alone wont help grow vitamin ...
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Line 15, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Rather,
...p grow vitamin A at a faster rate. Rather then promoting millet only government ...
^^^^^^
Line 15, column 8, Rule ID: RATHER_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'than'? 'than' is used for comparisons, 'then' is an expression of time.
Suggestion: than
...vitamin A at a faster rate. Rather then promoting millet only government can f...
^^^^
Line 15, column 12, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...min A at a faster rate. Rather then promoting millet only government can fin...
^^
Line 15, column 116, Rule ID: TRY_AND[1]
Message: "Try and" is common in colloquial speech, but "'try to'" is recommended for writing.
Suggestion: try to
...stly millet so that even the poorer can try and increase there vitamin A percent. ...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, may, so, still, then, thus, well, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 13.6137724551 29% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 9.0 28.8173652695 31% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 55.5748502994 74% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1264.0 2260.96107784 56% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 265.0 441.139720559 60% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76981132075 5.12650576532 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03470204552 4.56307096286 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51084936676 2.78398813304 90% => OK
Unique words: 123.0 204.123752495 60% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.464150943396 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 394.2 705.55239521 56% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 19.7664670659 46% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.8473053892 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 47.3215947886 57.8364921388 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.444444444 119.503703932 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.4444444444 23.324526521 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.44444444444 5.70786347227 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 6.88822355289 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.465454108605 0.218282227539 213% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.215544094405 0.0743258471296 290% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0677071833789 0.0701772020484 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.239964337522 0.128457276422 187% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0798532084408 0.0628817314937 127% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 14.3799401198 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.98 12.5979740519 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 98.500998004 51% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.1389221557 122% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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