An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
The international development organization as the paragraph says, has engineered a new breed of the millet in the poor state of Tagus which has the high amount of vitamin A in it. The people of Tagus are deficient in vitamin A which can be gained by this high vitamin millet which is grown there. As it is the staple food of the people of Tagus, why are they lacking in the terms of vitamin A is a matter of question and much more.
The first flaw is, the people of the nation Tagus has their staple food as millet which is newly engineered in that place only by an international development organization. Then why are they deficient in the vitamin A? what is the reason for this deficiency is not mentioned in the passage. Even if the consumption of this type of millet is an everyday routine of the people of Tagus, then why are they not healthy and fit. Why do they lack in the terms of vitamins? is an unanswered question in the passage.
The second flaw is, the price of the seeds of that new breed of the millet. According to the international development organization, the price of the seeds of the millet are very high and they are not affordable by the farmers of the Tagus. But it is said that, the farmers will be paid the subsidies required for growing the millet, but there is no surety given to the farmers that the subsidies will be given definitely. If the government of the Tagus has not manifested that they will pay the price for the seeds of the millet and so we cannot consider it as the fact that they will surely give. There is no statistics or sign of surety given to them.
The third flaw is, as the people of the Tagus are already using the millet as a staple food, then they would readily adopt the new variety of the millet with high vitamin A. If the seeds of this millet crop are already at a high price, the cost of the millet would also be high. As the nation, the Tagus is impoverished and has no high amount of earnings. How would the people there adopt that new variety very easily? It is an as different thing that if they cultivate the crop on their own, then they can have it as their food. But again ,the cultivation needs the seed which is of the high amount of cost.
Hence, we can say from the flaws that nor the people of Tagus are so wealthy to own the seeds on their own, neither the government has given the surety to pay subsidies. So, there are many assumptions made in the paragraph and there is the lack of evidence and proofs.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'hence', 'if', 'second', 'so', 'then', 'third']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.225933202358 0.25644967241 88% => OK
Verbs: 0.141453831041 0.15541462614 91% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0628683693517 0.0836205057962 75% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0550098231827 0.0520304965353 106% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0451866404715 0.0272364105082 166% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.143418467583 0.125424944231 114% => OK
Participles: 0.0353634577603 0.0416121511921 85% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.38667146673 2.79052419416 86% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0098231827112 0.026700313972 37% => Some infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.161100196464 0.113004496875 143% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0216110019646 0.0255425247493 85% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0235756385069 0.0127820249294 184% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2493.0 2731.13054187 91% => OK
No of words: 469.0 446.07635468 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.31556503198 6.12365571057 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65364457471 4.57801047555 102% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.230277185501 0.378187486979 61% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.147121535181 0.287650121315 51% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.0938166311301 0.208842608468 45% => More words length more than 7 chars wanted.
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0767590618337 0.135150697306 57% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38667146673 2.79052419416 86% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 207.018472906 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.356076759062 0.469332199767 76% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 39.6310635923 52.1807786196 76% => OK
How many sentences: 22.0 20.039408867 110% => OK
Sentence length: 21.3181818182 23.2022227129 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.2357291486 57.7814097925 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.318181818 141.986410481 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3181818182 23.2022227129 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.409090909091 0.724660767414 56% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 3.58251231527 112% => OK
Readability: 36.0303353363 51.9672348444 69% => OK
Elegance: 1.67479674797 1.8405768891 91% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.455407574639 0.441005458295 103% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.168019850393 0.135418324435 124% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.121933341072 0.0829849096947 147% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.646879784136 0.58762219726 110% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.162597089208 0.147661913831 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.220018750282 0.193483328276 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103204737172 0.0970749176394 106% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.633849685894 0.42659136922 149% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0897782871461 0.0774707102158 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.342410117074 0.312017818177 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.106882216769 0.0698173142475 153% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.33743842365 96% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.87684729064 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.82512315271 166% => OK
Positive topic words: 5.0 6.46551724138 77% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 5.36822660099 56% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.82389162562 142% => OK
Total topic words: 12.0 14.657635468 82% => OK
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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