A new study collected data that shows that people who snore are more likely to gain weight than are people who do not snore. It is well known that many people who snore also stop breathing frequently during the night for a few seconds, a condition called sleep apnea. The interruption of breathing wakes the person---often so briefly that the waking goes unnoticed---and can leave the person too tired during the day to exercise. Anyone who snores, therefore, should try to eat less than the average person and to exercise more.
The author of this argument claims that everyone, who snores, gains more weight than other, so that he should eat less. To support this recommendation the author cites the following fact. (1) These people usually wake up at midnight because of the stopping breath, and this cause they suffer of the lack of sleep (2) All day long, they are tired and cannot exercise, which affect to increase their weight. (3) All of these base on the research.
First and the most important reason is that the author provides no assurance that the survey on what the argument depends is statistically reliable. If the survey’s respondents are not representative of the overall population of people suffer of snooping, the author cannot generalize his conclusion to all people. In this matter, the survey gives not any information about the number of respondents or their occupational or resident profiles. The fewer respondents cause the less reliable results. In fact, it is entirely possible that the number of the respondents—in this matter— was too low to ensure that all people who sore surly have more weight than others.
Second, base on this fact that these people do not exercise in the day, the author infers that they are obese. Although common sense informs me that such a relationship exists, the author must provide some evidence of this cause-and-effect relationship before I can accept the author's final conclusion that their high weight is due to lack of physical activities. Eating high fat foods can put them at risk of obesity, and this cause can be more influential than exercise.
In the third place; this argument relies on the assumption that people who snore feel tired during the day because of the lack of sleep. However, it is likely the feeling tired due to other factors such as working more, financial problems, and so on. In fact, some people who participated in this survey had not been good economic conditions, so they had to work long time all day long. In this way, you never should expect that they could have enough time to exercise. Since the author has not identified of the main cause that why these people feel tired by logical evidence, I cannot convince people who snore, do not do not exercise, because they did not get sufficient sleep at night.
In sum, the speaker's advice for "any" snorer is ill-conceived and poorly supported. To lend credibility to this advice the speaker should provide clearly evidence that the recently collected data reflect the general population. To better assess the argument it would be useful to know all the possible causes of snoring and of sleep apnea.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 627, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a sore'.
Suggestion: who is a sore
...— was too low to ensure that all people who sore surly have more weight than others. S...
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Line 4, column 614, Rule ID: PHRASE_REPETITION[1]
Message: This phrase is duplicated. You should probably leave only 'do not'.
Suggestion: do not
...ce, I cannot convince people who snore, do not do not exercise, because they did not get suff...
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Line 5, column 13, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'speakers'' or 'speaker's'?
Suggestion: speakers'; speaker's
...ufficient sleep at night. In sum, the speakers advice for 'any' snorer is il...
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Discourse Markers used:
['first', 'however', 'if', 'second', 'so', 'third', 'as to', 'in fact', 'such as', 'in the third place']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.225548902196 0.25644967241 88% => OK
Verbs: 0.139720558882 0.15541462614 90% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0938123752495 0.0836205057962 112% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0538922155689 0.0520304965353 104% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0379241516966 0.0272364105082 139% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.127744510978 0.125424944231 102% => OK
Participles: 0.0179640718563 0.0416121511921 43% => Some participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.70631421617 2.79052419416 97% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0239520958084 0.026700313972 90% => OK
Particles: 0.00199600798403 0.001811407834 110% => OK
Determiners: 0.125748502994 0.113004496875 111% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0239520958084 0.0255425247493 94% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0179640718563 0.0127820249294 141% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2637.0 2731.13054187 97% => OK
No of words: 444.0 446.07635468 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.93918918919 6.12365571057 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5903493882 4.57801047555 100% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.358108108108 0.378187486979 95% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.222972972973 0.287650121315 78% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.15990990991 0.208842608468 77% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.103603603604 0.135150697306 77% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70631421617 2.79052419416 97% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 207.018472906 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52027027027 0.469332199767 111% => OK
Word variations: 59.8659347612 52.1807786196 115% => OK
How many sentences: 20.0 20.039408867 100% => OK
Sentence length: 22.2 23.2022227129 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.4878257176 57.7814097925 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.85 141.986410481 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2 23.2022227129 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.5 0.724660767414 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 3.58251231527 84% => OK
Readability: 44.4972972973 51.9672348444 86% => OK
Elegance: 1.60344827586 1.8405768891 87% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.295981463092 0.441005458295 67% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.111757185528 0.135418324435 83% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0530733435641 0.0829849096947 64% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.553756436604 0.58762219726 94% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.115539724655 0.147661913831 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117892043318 0.193483328276 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0775614765939 0.0970749176394 80% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.40884838657 0.42659136922 96% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0684181094371 0.0774707102158 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.200289485046 0.312017818177 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0586674702095 0.0698173142475 84% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.33743842365 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.87684729064 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.82512315271 83% => OK
Positive topic words: 5.0 6.46551724138 77% => OK
Negative topic words: 8.0 5.36822660099 149% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.82389162562 35% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 14.657635468 96% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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