"In our region of Trillura, the majority of money spent on the schools that most
students attend — the city-run public schools — comes from taxes that each city
government collects. The region's cities differ, however, in the budgetary priority
they give to public education. For example, both as a proportion of its overall tax
revenues and in absolute terms, Parson City has recently spent almost twice as
much per year as Blue City has for its public schools — even though both cities
have about the same number of residents. Clearly, Parson City residents place a
higher value on providing a good education in public schools than Blue City
residents do."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the
argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The letter to the editor of Parson City's local newspaper states that Parson city has a higher empahsis on the provision of good education in public schools as compared to the Blue city. The author asserts this because of higher proportion of budget allocated by Parson city as compared to Blue city since each cities have different budgetary priorities given for public schools. These assumptions are, however, rife with fallacies and the arguement presented by the author is significantly weakened due to three reasons.
To begin with, a good education in public schools can't be realized merely by spending a lot of money; the allocation of budget requires a timely execution of right amount of money on the right resources. It is possible that the budget is spent on increasing the salary of higher ups in the schools, providing more benefits to the management teams, and used recklessly on entertainment of staffs such as picnics, tours, and parties. A poor utilization of any amount of budget may not be able to ensure a good education in the schools. A higher expenditure of budget may not be the true indication of providign good education in public schools: The author's argument of Parson city giving a greater emphasis on good education in public schools compared to Blue city, therefore, does not hold water because of above reasons.
Furthermore, the public schools in both cities might be in an entirely different conditions -- one may be already lavish with all kinds of facilities right off the bat whereas the other one could still be in a developing phase. If one of the public schools in either cities is significantly different from the other schools, then it would obviously affect the proportion of budget required to be allocated by the respective cities. The author's argument does not have enough evidence to support their idea, thereby weakening the overall argument.
In addition to this, apart from the monetary aspects, quality of education also matters a lot which is dependent on several factors such as the quality of teachers, content of syllabus being taught to the students, allocation of appropriate resources for overall development of students and many more. However, the above argument presented by the author is vague and does not clarify such imperative aspects of education in public schools in either of the cities being discussed. There is potential for one of the cities to provide well trained and educated teachers or design a competitive syllabus to uplift the overall standard of students in their public schools. This suggests that the author's arguement is severely flawed.
Based on above arguments, it is evident that the assertion made by author does not hold water and is based on flawed assumptions. It is essential to evaluate other factors associated with the quality of education in public schools of both cities and more evidence is required to make any concrete statements.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 8 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 483 350
No. of Characters: 2410 1500
No. of Different Words: 208 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.688 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.99 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.683 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 202 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 144 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 100 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 62 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 30.188 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.169 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.625 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.372 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.372 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.105 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 51, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...ith, a good education in public schools cant be realized merely by spending a lot of...
^^^^
Line 2, column 648, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...n good education in public schools: The authors argument of Parson city giving a greate...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 437, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...allocated by the respective cities. The authors argument does not have enough evidence ...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, however, if, may, so, still, then, therefore, well, whereas, apart from, in addition, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 28.8173652695 49% => OK
Preposition: 85.0 55.5748502994 153% => OK
Nominalization: 28.0 16.3942115768 171% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2452.0 2260.96107784 108% => OK
No of words: 483.0 441.139720559 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07660455487 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68799114503 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73823554215 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 204.123752495 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.451345755694 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 785.7 705.55239521 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 22.8473053892 131% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 61.6338736005 57.8364921388 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 153.25 119.503703932 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.1875 23.324526521 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.9375 5.70786347227 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.251600018015 0.218282227539 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0925739849248 0.0743258471296 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0847779331773 0.0701772020484 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156470201854 0.128457276422 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0531462503982 0.0628817314937 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.6 14.3799401198 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 48.3550499002 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.197005988 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.78 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 8.32208582834 108% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 98.500998004 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 11.1389221557 126% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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