"In our region of Trillura, the majority of money spent on the schools that most students attend—the city-run public schools—comes from taxes that each city government collects. The region's cities differ, however, in the budgetary priority they give

The argument presented by the author sounds good and appears reasonable at first glance: as the author states that the amount of money collected from the taxes, is spent on public schools in higher proportion in the Parson City than in Blue City, thus, Parson City residents offer a better education in public schools than do Blue City residents. However, as more light is shed on the issue and more detailed facts are concerned, it is easy to point that the argument is rife with holes and suffers from several fallacious assumptions.

Firstly, citing at the statement presented by the author that despite the number of residents being the same in both the cities, Parson City has spent almost twice of its revenue for its public schools than did Blue City. Here, the author makes a clear assumption that the number of residents being the same, the number of students will be the same. In fact, this cannot be the case. The Parson City might have more students than the Blue City, thus, indulging Parson City to spent more of its revenue in public schools compared to that of Blue City.

Moreover, even if it is the case that the number of students are almost same and even though Blue City does spend lesser than the Parson City spent for its public schools. What does that really mean? Is it that Parson City residents are more concerned for its public schools than that of the residents of the Blue City? Here, the author juxtaposed the two cities based on the statistics of a particular single year. There is every possibility that in the previous years the Blue City has used up much of its revenues in rejuvenating and improving the infrastructures of its public schools and they do not require much of financial support in the current year as anything required is already obtained. This may not be the case with Parson City.

Lastly, the author makes a clear assumption that the Parson City residents pays higher importance to quality education in public schools as compared to that of Blue City residents. The author bases this point merely on just one assumption that the Parson City residents use its revenue on public school development more than that of Blue City residents do. The author before stating the point does not focus on any of the other factors and possibilities in the two cities. There can be a possible instance in the Blue City that the number of students opting to go to a public school are less compared to that of those who prefer private schools and the reversal might be the case with Parson City.

In order to bolster the argument, the author has to present more cogent and concrete evidences regarding the student population and their preference over private and public schools. He/she should also evaluate how tantamount the two cities are and also present the previous years record of spending on public schools in both the cities.In order to access the merits of a certain situation, it is important to know all contributing factors. Thus, the unsubstantiated assumptions made by the author makes his/her argument weaker and open to debate.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 337, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: In
...ng on public schools in both the cities.In order to access the merits of a certain...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'firstly', 'however', 'if', 'lastly', 'may', 'moreover', 'really', 'regarding', 'so', 'thus', 'as to', 'in fact']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.272727272727 0.25644967241 106% => OK
Verbs: 0.136363636364 0.15541462614 88% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0996503496503 0.0836205057962 119% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0472027972028 0.0520304965353 91% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0244755244755 0.0272364105082 90% => OK
Prepositions: 0.141608391608 0.125424944231 113% => OK
Participles: 0.0402097902098 0.0416121511921 97% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.44415105598 2.79052419416 88% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0227272727273 0.026700313972 85% => OK
Particles: 0.00174825174825 0.001811407834 97% => OK
Determiners: 0.134615384615 0.113004496875 119% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0122377622378 0.0255425247493 48% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00699300699301 0.0127820249294 55% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3087.0 2731.13054187 113% => OK
No of words: 533.0 446.07635468 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.79174484053 6.12365571057 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80487177365 4.57801047555 105% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.341463414634 0.378187486979 90% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.213883677298 0.287650121315 74% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.146341463415 0.208842608468 70% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0956848030019 0.135150697306 71% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44415105598 2.79052419416 88% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 207.018472906 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.397748592871 0.469332199767 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 45.8253032827 52.1807786196 88% => OK
How many sentences: 19.0 20.039408867 95% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0526315789 23.2022227129 121% => OK
Sentence length SD: 82.3560273171 57.7814097925 143% => OK
Chars per sentence: 162.473684211 141.986410481 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0526315789 23.2022227129 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.789473684211 0.724660767414 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 3.58251231527 28% => OK
Readability: 49.4409993088 51.9672348444 95% => OK
Elegance: 2.18487394958 1.8405768891 119% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.551070826032 0.441005458295 125% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.163250913382 0.135418324435 121% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.101060714313 0.0829849096947 122% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.63971819787 0.58762219726 109% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.183381475132 0.147661913831 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.28968072759 0.193483328276 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104754604 0.0970749176394 108% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.604066008749 0.42659136922 142% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.102226179334 0.0774707102158 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.441965143262 0.312017818177 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0622192712997 0.0698173142475 89% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.33743842365 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.87684729064 58% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.82512315271 166% => OK
Positive topic words: 7.0 6.46551724138 108% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 5.36822660099 75% => OK
Neutral topic words: 6.0 2.82389162562 212% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 14.657635468 116% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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