Today’s young people are builders of tomorrows generating society. Young people plays a crucial role in the development of a future society; they are the one who revitalise an enervated or exhaust a vibrant society. They are the pillars of the future world, the deeper the pillars are, the stronger the building is, thus, the stronger the world is.
I believe that the younger once should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals instead of seeking an instance fame and recognition because what actually matters is the foundation. The deeper the roots of a tree the more it will survive. If the foundation itself is weak and unstable, it is likely to fall at any instance. And such stable foundation is not generally acquired in fewer days, instead, it needs some time to ingrain and to strengthen its roots. Like, consider the construction of the Taj Mahal, one among the 7 wonders of the world. If the construction of this monolithic structure would have taken a few days, then the recognition and the appreciation it gets today would not have been at its peak.
Moreover, as it is said one learns from the experiences and the mistakes one make. To earn a long-lasting fame and recognition one has to have a good experience to maintain it. If one doesn’t have a good understanding of utilising this fame and making the best use of it, it might take an instance to lose it. The experience can make a person better and thus making him/her to explore his/her fame. One of the good example is the Narendra Modi. He has a tea stall, but was well enough to utilise his skills and got entered in to the parliament and gradually became the chief minister and then the prime minister. If he would have not utilised his skill and knowledge with his experience he would have not achieved the admiration he gets now.
The last example, I could put is about the founder of the scrumptious food store KFC. This man initially used to manage a small stalls of food but didn’t realised his actually potential. Once he recognised his potential, at his 50’s he thought of doing something big. Now, he was having a good experience and the courage to stand on his own, came up with an idea of starting a fast food restaurant-KFC. He has good all the fame and recognition because he had started his journey gradually rather than jumping to get an instant fame.
Thus, I believe the fame and recognition obtained immediately does not last long. Every successful person through his experience get an insight of his potential and becomes firm to grasp fame. One need not follow the fame instead the fame will follow the one who really deserves it.
- The following appeared in a recommendation from the President of the Amburg Chamber of Commerce."Last October, the city of Belleville installed high-intensity lighting in its central business district, and vandalism there declined almost immediately. The 83
- The following appeared in a letter to the editor of Parson City's local newspaper."In our region of Trillura, the majority of money spent on the schools that most students attend—the city-run public schools—comes from taxes that each city government c 54
- Young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for t 54
- "In our region of Trillura, the majority of money spent on the schools that most students attend—the city-run public schools—comes from taxes that each city government collects. The region's cities differ, however, in the budgetary priority they give 58
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...than jumping to get an instant fame. Thus I believe, the fame and recognition obt...
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Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'but', 'if', 'moreover', 'really', 'so', 'then', 'thus', 'well', 'as to']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.204198473282 0.240241500013 85% => OK
Verbs: 0.162213740458 0.157235817809 103% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0820610687023 0.0880659088768 93% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0610687022901 0.0497285424764 123% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0725190839695 0.0444667217837 163% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.074427480916 0.12292977631 61% => OK
Participles: 0.0343511450382 0.0406280797675 85% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.72746328982 2.79330140395 98% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0286259541985 0.030933414821 93% => OK
Particles: 0.00190839694656 0.0016655270985 115% => OK
Determiners: 0.125954198473 0.0997080785238 126% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0190839694656 0.0249443105267 77% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00572519083969 0.0148568991511 39% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2663.0 2732.02544248 97% => OK
No of words: 464.0 452.878318584 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.73922413793 6.0361032391 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64119157421 4.58838876751 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.3125 0.366273622748 85% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.243534482759 0.280924506359 87% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.176724137931 0.200843997647 88% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.118534482759 0.132149295362 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72746328982 2.79330140395 98% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 219.290929204 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521551724138 0.48968727796 107% => OK
Word variations: 60.9312371288 55.4138127331 110% => OK
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6194690265 116% => OK
Sentence length: 19.3333333333 23.380412469 83% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.0080768332 59.4972553346 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.958333333 141.124799967 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3333333333 23.380412469 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.416666666667 0.674092028746 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.21349557522 38% => OK
Readability: 43.6867816092 51.4728631049 85% => OK
Elegance: 1.05806451613 1.64882698954 64% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.309954353126 0.391690518653 79% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.124287986406 0.123202303941 101% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.078506872589 0.077325440228 102% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.523699258693 0.547984918172 96% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.110177423686 0.149214159877 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124056379186 0.161403998019 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0628943888795 0.0892212321368 70% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.428838782837 0.385218514788 111% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0762223262719 0.0692045440612 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.20787763782 0.275328986314 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0448530174881 0.0653680567796 69% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.4325221239 153% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.30420353982 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88274336283 82% => OK
Positive topic words: 10.0 7.22455752212 138% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 3.66592920354 109% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.70907079646 74% => OK
Total topic words: 16.0 13.5995575221 118% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.