Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The argument concludes that if the skateboarding is prohibited in Central plaza ,the business in Central Plaza would return to its previously high levels.But there are many questions unanswered here as well as many assumptions are wrongly taken due to which this recommendation might not get be able to achieve its predicted result.
Firstly,the argument states that the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing over the past two years while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically.What was the scenario before two years?How can just the data of two years be compared with previous years?there might be a possibility that there were less inhabitants near central Plaza during previous years and now that the inhabitants have increased that much percentage of people shopping in Central Plaza could not be seen because eventually the number of shoppers might be same or it might have increased.But due to increase in population in the area surrounding central Plaza,the number of shoppers percentage wise might have decreased but in quantity might have increased or it could be vice versa(number of inhabitants surrounding the area might have decreased and so the number of shoppers might have decreased).
Secondly the shop owners believe that due to increase in the number of skateboard users in the plaza their business has gradually decreased.But how can increase in number of skateboard users in plaza really affect their business?Increase in skateboard users indicate that people do come to their plaza but they might not be interested in shopping from their shops because their quality of product might have deteriorated or they might not have upgraded their stock according to the need of the customers.Skateboarding can very well be fruitful for their business because people who come with their children can shop without any concern by keeping their children occupied in skateboarding.Also if the plaza has more than one floors which are wide and people might feel tired by walking they can use skateboards if they know skateboarding and can reach their shops with great comfort.So this reason given by the shop owners can not get their recommendation to pass.
Finally,how can they assume that the increase in littering and vandalism caused throughout the plaza is done by skateboarders in the plaza?there might be some outside factor like a faction protesting on streets or a union strike that might well have caused the vandalism.And for the littering their own employees might have littered in the plaza or the person who cleans their plaza might not be doing his/her duty seriously.So these reasons provided by the owners in order to support their argument to prohibit the skateboarders might need some more proof and evidences against the skateboarders.
To conclude the shop owners recommendation to prohibit skateboarding in their plaza might need backup from some strong evidences and statistical data which can make their case stronger.Otherwise their prediction to restore the sales to previous levels might fail and their presumption against the skateboarders fails due to the above mentioned reasons and they need to find some other reason to make their prediction work because their recommendation to prohibit skateboarding is weak due to varied reasons.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 9 15
No. of Words: 544 350
No. of Characters: 2765 1500
No. of Different Words: 224 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.829 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.083 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.76 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 176 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 140 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 108 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 69 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 60.444 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 29.852 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.45 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.741 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.232 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
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...eboarding is prohibited in Central plaza ,the business in Central Plaza would retu...
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Suggestion: But
...ld return to its previously high levels.But there are many questions unanswered her...
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Suggestion: , the
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Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun inhabitants is countable.
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Suggestion: Otherwise,
...data which can make their case stronger.Otherwise their prediction to restore the sales t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, really, second, secondly, so, well, while, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 35.0 12.9520958084 270% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 20.0 11.1786427146 179% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 28.8173652695 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 55.5748502994 131% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2805.0 2260.96107784 124% => OK
No of words: 526.0 441.139720559 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.33269961977 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78901763229 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13781585366 2.78398813304 113% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 204.123752495 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.425855513308 0.468620217663 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 847.8 705.55239521 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 19.7664670659 25% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 105.0 22.8473053892 460% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 240.728893156 57.8364921388 416% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 561.0 119.503703932 469% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 105.2 23.324526521 451% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 18.6 5.70786347227 326% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 5.25449101796 362% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.356753920795 0.218282227539 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.200705234314 0.0743258471296 270% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0670663308084 0.0701772020484 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.200705234314 0.128457276422 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0670663308084 0.0628817314937 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 56.3 14.3799401198 392% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -35.1 48.3550499002 -73% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 18.2 7.1628742515 254% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 44.2 12.197005988 362% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 14.82 12.5979740519 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.97 8.32208582834 144% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 98.500998004 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 29.0 12.3882235529 234% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 44.0 11.1389221557 395% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 44.0 11.9071856287 370% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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