"Over the past year, our late-night news program has devoted increasingly more time to covering national news and less time to covering weather and local news. During the same time period, most of the complaints we received from viewers were concerned with the station's coverage of weather and local news. In addition, several local businesses that used to run advertisements during our late-night news program have just cancelled their advertising contracts with us. Therefore, in order to attract more viewers to our news programs and to avoid losing any further advertising revenues, we should expand the coverage of weather and local news on all our news programs."
In the paragraph, the author sees that reviving their TV channel's late-night news' original coverage sectional times would help increasing their viewers number and would also check the loss of TV adverting income since . While in fact, the author has buit his predection onto a weak assumption which needs further evidence to confirm the efficiancy of his claim.
First, regarding the decline in advertising contracts, the authos should have considered the presence of factors other than veiwers complains. For example, since TV channels are growing up rapidly in the era of breaking-news, competetive channels with more viewers and less cost may be the reason behind the surging in numbers of local businesses' deals with this channel. Other potential reasons might be that businesses themselves are losing weight in markets.
Second, when examining the claim carefully, we can notice that the author have mentioned that the comlplaints were focused on their shortage of coverage of local news and weather, however, no sentence states that the number of viewers has fallen down along with the complaints. This strongly weakens the argument as it suspend the relationship which links losing advertising revenues and viewrs' overall number.
Moreover, TV channels' advertising materials are not viewed during the night only, further, most of the companies make full-day contracts with the owners to show their advertisment all the day long with the agreeable intervals.
In conclusion, the argument could be taking seriously and would have a better sense of judgment with more evidence such as considering other factors playing the role the decline of advertising revenues and having a better insight over the number of views that may not be affected along with the complains, as well as widening their view to examine the state of the advertises which belongs to the businesses mentioned.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: While in fact, the author has buit his predection onto a weak assumption which needs further evidence to confirm the efficiancy of his claim.
Error: efficiancy Suggestion: efficiency
Error: predection Suggestion: prediction
Error: buit Suggestion: built
Sentence: First, regarding the decline in advertising contracts, the authos should have considered the presence of factors other than veiwers complains.
Error: veiwers Suggestion: viewers
Error: authos Suggestion: author
Sentence: For example, since TV channels are growing up rapidly in the era of breaking-news, competetive channels with more viewers and less cost may be the reason behind the surging in numbers of local businesses' deals with this channel.
Error: competetive Suggestion: competitive
Sentence: Second, when examining the claim carefully, we can notice that the author have mentioned that the comlplaints were focused on their shortage of coverage of local news and weather, however, no sentence states that the number of viewers has fallen down along with the complaints.
Error: comlplaints Suggestion: complaints
Sentence: This strongly weakens the argument as it suspend the relationship which links losing advertising revenues and viewrs' overall number.
Error: viewrs Suggestion: views
Sentence: Moreover, TV channels' advertising materials are not viewed during the night only, further, most of the companies make full-day contracts with the owners to show their advertisment all the day long with the agreeable intervals.
Error: advertisment Suggestion: advertisement
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argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- not exactly
argument 3 -- duplicated to argument 2
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flaws:
Need to argue against the conclusion always. For this topic it is:
Therefore, in order to attract more viewers to our news programs and to avoid losing any further advertising revenues, we should expand the coverage of weather and local news on all our news programs.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 9 2
No. of Sentences: 9 15
No. of Words: 298 350
No. of Characters: 1559 1500
No. of Different Words: 172 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.155 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.232 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.618 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 120 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 93 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 64 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 42 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 33.111 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 16.292 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.778 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.382 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.728 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.05 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 128, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to increase' or 'increase'.
Suggestion: to increase; increase
...nal coverage sectional times would help increasing their viewers number and would also che...
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Line 1, column 218, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ck the loss of TV adverting income since . While in fact, the author has buit his ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, may, moreover, regarding, second, so, well, while, for example, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 19.6327345309 41% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 55.5748502994 76% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1598.0 2260.96107784 71% => OK
No of words: 298.0 441.139720559 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.36241610738 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7049351767 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 204.123752495 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.587248322148 0.468620217663 125% => OK
syllable_count: 470.7 705.55239521 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 19.7664670659 46% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 22.8473053892 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 93.3856995952 57.8364921388 161% => OK
Chars per sentence: 177.555555556 119.503703932 149% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.1111111111 23.324526521 142% => OK
Discourse Markers: 14.3333333333 5.70786347227 251% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.116722657775 0.218282227539 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0449972077176 0.0743258471296 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0550357498773 0.0701772020484 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0644279649997 0.128457276422 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0372662536369 0.0628817314937 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.4 14.3799401198 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.98 48.3550499002 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 12.197005988 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.4 12.5979740519 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.99 8.32208582834 120% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 98.500998004 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 11.1389221557 136% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.