Pirouettes Ballet School is the clear choice for any child. Of all the dance schools in Elmtown, Pirouettes has the most intensive program, and our teachers have danced in the most prestigious ballet companies all over the world. Many of our students have gone on to become professional dancers with top dance companies.
The author concludes that Pirouettes Ballet schools is the clear choice for any child. he backs up his statement by giving several reasons. He says that pirouettes has the most intensive program and further the asserts that their teachers have danced in the most prestigious ballet companies all over the world. He also says that many of their students have become professional dancers with top dance companies. I Find his reasons flawed because he doesn't tells anything about the other schools.
Firstly, he asserts that of all the dance schools in Elmtown, Pirouettes has the most intensive program but doesn't tell us how many Ballet schools are there in Elmtown. there may be only 2-3 Ballet schools and in comparison to that Pirouettes has the most intensive program. So there may be many ballet schools which are better that Pirouettes.
Let's consider if there may be considerable amount of Ballet schools in Elmtown, he says that pirouettes ballet schools is the clear choice because their teachers have danced in the most prestigious ballet companies. But there may be chance that other school teacher may have also danced in the the most prestigious ballet companies and the chances are these teachers may be more in number in other schools. so he must first clear this statement before concluding anything about which is the clear choice.
thirdly, He asserts that their students have gone to become professional dancers with top dance companies. To give weight to his statement he must tell us the strength of the schools and the number of students who became professional dancers with top dance companies.
If they strength is 1000 and out of that only 10-15 have become professional dancers that the chances are those students had dancing talent before joining the Pirouettes Ballet school and this school uses their name without their own efforts to teach those students.
To prove that Pirouettes Ballet school is the clear choice for any child of all the schools the author must refute all the statements stated above and give us more extensive details about their Ballet school. The little information given doesn't prove that pirouettes Ballet school is the best among other Ballet schools.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'firstly', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'third', 'thirdly']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.272727272727 0.25644967241 106% => OK
Verbs: 0.166233766234 0.15541462614 107% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0857142857143 0.0836205057962 103% => OK
Adverbs: 0.038961038961 0.0520304965353 75% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0623376623377 0.0272364105082 229% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.124675324675 0.125424944231 99% => OK
Participles: 0.0311688311688 0.0416121511921 75% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.43580904365 2.79052419416 87% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0155844155844 0.026700313972 58% => OK
Particles: 0.0025974025974 0.001811407834 143% => OK
Determiners: 0.0987012987013 0.113004496875 87% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0233766233766 0.0255425247493 92% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.012987012987 0.0127820249294 102% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2222.0 2731.13054187 81% => OK
No of words: 365.0 446.07635468 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.08767123288 6.12365571057 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.57801047555 95% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.386301369863 0.378187486979 102% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.249315068493 0.287650121315 87% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.158904109589 0.208842608468 76% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0986301369863 0.135150697306 73% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43580904365 2.79052419416 87% => OK
Unique words: 137.0 207.018472906 66% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.375342465753 0.469332199767 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 38.3966333411 52.1807786196 74% => OK
How many sentences: 16.0 20.039408867 80% => OK
Sentence length: 22.8125 23.2022227129 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.3032461169 57.7814097925 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.875 141.986410481 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8125 23.2022227129 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.5625 0.724660767414 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.14285714286 117% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 3.58251231527 391% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 47.7440068493 51.9672348444 92% => OK
Elegance: 1.60194174757 1.8405768891 87% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.648181131565 0.441005458295 147% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.207628586591 0.135418324435 153% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.155224529337 0.0829849096947 187% => Ideas in sentences are similar.
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.6638337315 0.58762219726 113% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.207122038782 0.147661913831 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.289958690919 0.193483328276 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.175546046978 0.0970749176394 181% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.343240656403 0.42659136922 80% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.105727337 0.0774707102158 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.413488488542 0.312017818177 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.125723196244 0.0698173142475 180% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.33743842365 144% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 6.87684729064 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.82512315271 83% => OK
Positive topic words: 9.0 6.46551724138 139% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 5.36822660099 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.82389162562 71% => OK
Total topic words: 11.0 14.657635468 75% => OK
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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