The author's assumption is flawed for numerous reasons. Primarily, the argument is based on an unwarranted assumption that the Balmer island and the Torseau island are the same, rendering its main conclusion that the Balmer island will follow the success of Torseau island.
To begin with, the argument fails to provide any justification regarding the similarities between the two islands. There may be a chance of variations of the number of people living in both islands. Besides, there is no indication of the area of the two islands. The discrepancy between the two islands never leads to the same results. If the author mentions the exact number of people, the exact area in both the islands then it would be enough to draw the conclusion easily.
Secondly, the author states that the reduction of cost regarding renting of moped and bicycle would diminish the accident rate between moped and pedestrians. Actually, Accident depends upon various factors. It includes the lackings of traffic knowledge, traffic facilities as well as awareness, skills of a rider. But the author hardly mentions these factors in the passage. Maybe cost reduction will increase the number of riders who previously is not able to rent due to exorbitant rent, but if the rider lacks social awareness and traffic knowledge, then how could it be possible to expect the reduction of the accident?
Thirdly, the author initially made a statement that the population of Balmer island increases at such a rate that it doubles in its previous year."Being population doubled", is completely a vague notation if you have not any idea of its initial population. To illustrate this, suppose in the previous year the population of Balmer island is 10 if it doubles it would be 20. This does not necessarily represent a large number, hence cost reduction may hamper the business. on the contrary, in Torseau island, there may be as long as 2000 people. Hence, cost reduction is Torseau hardly affects the business, rather it would help to enhance the business as a large density of people started to rent.
Finally, The author compares a year with a specific season(Summer). The author claims without any warrant that what held true previous year will hold true today. However, it does not provide any evidence that nothing has been changed significantly.
In conclusion, as the author makes several unwarranted assumptions, it fails to make a convincing case that the Balmer island will mirror the success of the Torseau island.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 413 350
No. of Characters: 2034 1500
No. of Different Words: 193 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.508 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.925 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.603 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 164 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 118 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 71 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.65 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.674 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.8 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.298 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.576 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.091 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 5, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
The authors assumption is flawed for numerous reaso...
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Line 7, column 483, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: On
...cost reduction may hamper the business. on the contrary, in Torseau island, there ...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, besides, but, finally, hence, however, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, well, in conclusion, as well as, on the contrary, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 55.5748502994 86% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2114.0 2260.96107784 94% => OK
No of words: 412.0 441.139720559 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13106796117 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79467920853 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 204.123752495 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492718446602 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 646.2 705.55239521 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 61.9472015697 57.8364921388 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.666666667 119.503703932 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.619047619 23.324526521 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.38095238095 5.70786347227 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209645455854 0.218282227539 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0547861540966 0.0743258471296 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0707269787748 0.0701772020484 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111172900069 0.128457276422 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.072876846655 0.0628817314937 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 14.3799401198 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 98.500998004 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.