The prompt tells about the reducing species population in the sea due to the deep-sea fishing.In today's world we humans have started eating all kinds of food and with access to the grate technology and the advancement in all the field,did not leave the fishing industry as well.the prompt suggest the deep-sea fishing is the main reason for the Mandagascan shrimph to become an endangered species. But i strongly disagree with the statement with the given information. Before coming to the conclusion the following question has to be answered.
First of all, when deep sea fishermen started fishing in to the Madasascan shrimph habitat what are they mainly focused on. are they collectinng mainly shrimps or other species as well.On what bases we are saying that the shrimp species has reduced? was there any scientific study was conducted to provide cogent avidence to it. Was the reduction is the shrimph was just seasonal or observed through out other seasons as well .
Secondly, Earth has 75 percent of water and most of it is covered by sea, . it is belived that there are so many live species are there which not yet discovered. Just because of the the deep-sea fishing is making any difference in the entire shrimph eco system.Information provided regarding the reduction in the shrimph and coming back to normalcy does not supported by any research, statistics, how the the numder are taken.what is the gaurantee that the reduction in the shrimph is not because of the other external factor's like global warming or may be because of the some internal environment changes within the Madagascan sea it self.
The given information in the prompt is not sufficient to come to a conclusion that the deep sea fishing the only the reason for the reduction in the madagascan shrimph's and no evidece shows that it will lead in making the Madascan shrimp make endangered. If some research might conducted regarding the shrimph population and how the fishing will affect the ecopsystem of the shrimph species in that region will help in understading more about it. the given information alone can not be used to made any conclusion.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 9 15
No. of Words: 362 350
No. of Characters: 1749 1500
No. of Different Words: 178 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.362 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.831 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.593 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 131 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 104 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 63 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 41 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 40.222 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 23.165 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.41 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.649 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.093 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
The prompt tells about the reducing spec...
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Line 1, column 101, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: In
... in the sea due to the deep-sea fishing.In todays world we humans have started eat...
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Line 1, column 241, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , did
...ogy and the advancement in all the field,did not leave the fishing industry as well....
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Line 1, column 476, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Before” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...e statement with the given information. Before coming to the conclusion the following ...
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Line 3, column 91, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ing in to the Madasascan shrimph habitat what are they mainly focused on. are the...
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Line 3, column 187, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: On
...mainly shrimps or other species as well.On what bases we are saying that the shrim...
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Line 3, column 252, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Was
...ng that the shrimp species has reduced? was there any scientific study was conducte...
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Line 3, column 394, Rule ID: THROUGH_OUT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'throughout'?
Suggestion: throughout
...e shrimph was just seasonal or observed through out other seasons as well . Secondly, Ea...
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Line 3, column 427, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...served through out other seasons as well . Secondly, Earth has 75 percent of wa...
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Line 5, column 74, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
... water and most of it is covered by sea, . it is belived that there are so many li...
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Line 5, column 77, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...ter and most of it is covered by sea, . it is belived that there are so many live ...
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Line 5, column 179, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...ich not yet discovered. Just because of the the deep-sea fishing is making any differen...
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Line 5, column 179, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...ich not yet discovered. Just because of the the deep-sea fishing is making any differen...
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Line 5, column 262, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Information
...erence in the entire shrimph eco system.Information provided regarding the reduction in the...
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Line 5, column 359, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'support'
Suggestion: support
...ph and coming back to normalcy does not supported by any research, statistics, how the th...
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Line 5, column 402, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...ported by any research, statistics, how the the numder are taken.what is the gaurantee ...
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Line 5, column 402, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...ported by any research, statistics, how the the numder are taken.what is the gaurantee ...
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Line 5, column 467, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...what is the gaurantee that the reduction in the shrimph is not because of the oth...
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Line 5, column 574, Rule ID: THE_SOME_DAY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'same'?
Suggestion: same
...global warming or may be because of the some internal environment changes within the...
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Line 5, column 634, Rule ID: IT_SELF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'itself'?
Suggestion: itself
...nment changes within the Madagascan sea it self. The given information in the prompt...
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Line 7, column 105, Rule ID: THE_EXACTLY_THE[1]
Message: Duplicated 'the' in the phrase: 'the only the'. Did you mean 'only the'?
Suggestion: only the
... a conclusion that the deep sea fishing the only the reason for the reduction in the madagas...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, well, as to, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 55.5748502994 86% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1790.0 2260.96107784 79% => OK
No of words: 358.0 441.139720559 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72598379568 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 204.123752495 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.505586592179 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 542.7 705.55239521 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 22.8473053892 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 129.408623036 57.8364921388 224% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 137.692307692 119.503703932 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.5384615385 23.324526521 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.07692307692 5.70786347227 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 21.0 5.25449101796 400% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186727716142 0.218282227539 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0617856680989 0.0743258471296 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0482924905666 0.0701772020484 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115213235797 0.128457276422 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0245139485565 0.0628817314937 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 14.3799401198 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 48.3550499002 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 12.197005988 103% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 98.500998004 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.1389221557 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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