A recent sales study indicates that consumption of seafood dishes in Bay City restaurants has increased by 30 percent during the past five years. Yet there are no currently operating city restaurants whose specialty is seafood. Mor

The writer think that the new Captain Seafood restaurant which specializes in seafood should be quite popular and profitable given a resent sales study and a nationwide study. However, it is hard to say the profit and celebrity of the restaurants is very related with some investigation based on the public trends. Thus, personally, this argument given the writer is not quite resonable.
Firstly, the writer adduced a recent sales study in order to indicate that the consumption of seafood in Bay City restaurants has a steady increasing in the past five years.And he think that the reason about the increased consumption is related to the majority concerning of the heathful eating.It may true, but maybe just because the seafood in Bay City restaurant is very delicious so many people would like to go to this restaurant and have a taste of their delicious seafood.
On the other hand, there are still some other causes for the raising in consumption of seafood. For example, the location. Maybe the Bay City restaurant is located in a city center or a shopping mall which is very convenient in traffic. In addition, the menu of the seafood would be more attractable to the customer.The picture of seafood printed on the menu book would be seemed delicious than other dishes. Thus, people would also like to buy this restaurant's seafood.However, The writer don't give us enough informations about all these hypothesis above.
Secondly, the writer mentioned a nationwide study about the families preference about their diet. He or She said that most of Bay City families are two-income families.Their preference of the food is something more healthier. Nevetheless, for sometimes, seafood is not always healthy because it depends on the way of cooking for instance.As we all know, a fried fish is not always healthy for most of the people.
All in all, the writer didn't give enough information to strong his or her arguments. If the seafood is healthy enough? Is it really full of nutritious substances? If the new Captain seafood is located in a convenient site for citizen? If the new restaurant could serve customers with delicious seafood dishes? If the writer give all of these explaination, he or she may have a more convincing and reasonable conjecture.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 12, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'thinks'.
Suggestion: thinks
The writer think that the new Captain Seafood restaurant...
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Line 2, column 173, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: And
...teady increasing in the past five years.And he think that the reason about the incr...
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Line 2, column 180, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'thinks'.
Suggestion: thinks
...ncreasing in the past five years.And he think that the reason about the increased con...
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Suggestion: It
...ority concerning of the heathful eating.It may true, but maybe just because the se...
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Suggestion: The
...uld be more attractable to the customer.The picture of seafood printed on the menu ...
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Line 3, column 451, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'restaurants'' or 'restaurant's'?
Suggestion: restaurants'; restaurant's
...hus, people would also like to buy this restaurants seafood.However, The writer dont give u...
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Suggestion: However
...so like to buy this restaurants seafood.However, The writer dont give us enough informa...
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Line 3, column 491, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...restaurants seafood.However, The writer dont give us enough informations about all t...
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Line 3, column 534, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this hypothesis' or 'these hypotheses', 'these hypothesises'?
Suggestion: this hypothesis; these hypotheses; these hypothesises
...t give us enough informations about all these hypothesis above. Secondly, the writer mentioned ...
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Line 4, column 61, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'families'' or 'family's'?
Suggestion: families'; family's
... mentioned a nationwide study about the families preference about their diet. He or She ...
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Suggestion: Their
...y City families are two-income families.Their preference of the food is something mor...
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Line 4, column 210, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'healthier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: healthier
...eir preference of the food is something more healthier. Nevetheless, for sometimes, seafood is...
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Line 4, column 338, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: As
...ends on the way of cooking for instance.As we all know, a fried fish is not always...
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Line 5, column 24, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
... of the people. All in all, the writer didnt give enough information to strong his o...
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Line 5, column 310, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ustomers with delicious seafood dishes? If the writer give all of these explainati...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, still, thus, for example, for instance, in addition, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 55.5748502994 85% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1889.0 2260.96107784 84% => OK
No of words: 377.0 441.139720559 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01061007958 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8988050038 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 204.123752495 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.46949602122 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 590.4 705.55239521 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 97.5774462911 57.8364921388 169% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.944444444 119.503703932 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9444444444 23.324526521 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.05555555556 5.70786347227 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.25449101796 285% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.313916842189 0.218282227539 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0861889711739 0.0743258471296 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100352754319 0.0701772020484 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183476204611 0.128457276422 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.121707806494 0.0628817314937 194% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 98.500998004 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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