Statistics gathered over the past three decades show that the death rate is higher among those who do not have jobs than among those with regular employment. Unemployment, just like heart disease and cancer, is a significant health issue. While many health care advocates promote increased government funding for medical research and public health care, it would be folly to increase government spending if doing so were to affect the nation’s economy adversely and ultimately cause a rise in unemployment. A Healthy economy means healthy citizen
The following points must be noted in regard to the given passage. It says statistics show that death rate is higher among those who do not have jobs than the ones who have jobs. The postulate might just be a co incidence. The reason might also be due to improper construction and maintenance of roads, no regulating authority, issuing licenses at ease, corruption etc might also be the factors affecting it. Hence, a consolidate report covering diverse factors must be made in order to know the actual cause of these accidents.
The passage also states that healthy economy means healthy citizens. This assumption is flawed in many ways. We are provided with no insight to the demographic conditions of a place, nor the level of efficiency of governance, developmental policies, health care methods etc which play an important role in determining the health of its citizens. Mere improvement in money or economy doesn’t necessarily indicate the level of health of people.
Unemployment need not necessarily be a health issue. There might be citizens who are very healthy and might still be unemployed. There may be people who are employed but have a severe health issue. Hence, we cannot confidently say that unemployment is a health issue.
The passage also says that increased government funding towards research and public health care would affect the nation’s economy adversely there by unemployment. We do not know how much capital is being currently spent towards research and public health care. If the amount is too less, then there is definitely a need to actually increase funds so that better knowledge of the existing problems can be traced and solutions can be developed.
Hence a comprehensive analysis must be made involving all the factors leading to the problem and answers must be developed.
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- Statistics gathered over the past three decades show that the death rate is higher among those who do not have jobs than among those with regular employment. Unemployment, just like heart disease and cancer, is a significant health issue. While many healt 50
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 417, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...lso be the factors affecting it. Hence, a consolidate report covering diverse factors must be...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...traced and solutions can be developed. Hence a comprehensive analysis must be made i...
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Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'also', 'but', 'hence', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'still', 'then', 'in regard to']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.267692307692 0.25644967241 104% => OK
Verbs: 0.190769230769 0.15541462614 123% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0769230769231 0.0836205057962 92% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0646153846154 0.0520304965353 124% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0184615384615 0.0272364105082 68% => OK
Prepositions: 0.0769230769231 0.125424944231 61% => OK
Participles: 0.0615384615385 0.0416121511921 148% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.82440516528 2.79052419416 101% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0184615384615 0.026700313972 69% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0984615384615 0.113004496875 87% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0461538461538 0.0255425247493 181% => Less modal verbs wanted (like 'must , shall , will , should , would , can , could , may , and might').
WH_determiners: 0.0184615384615 0.0127820249294 144% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1817.0 2731.13054187 67% => OK
No of words: 298.0 446.07635468 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.09731543624 6.12365571057 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.57801047555 91% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.38255033557 0.378187486979 101% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.275167785235 0.287650121315 96% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.197986577181 0.208842608468 95% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.147651006711 0.135150697306 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82440516528 2.79052419416 101% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 207.018472906 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.580536912752 0.469332199767 124% => OK
Word variations: 62.4903773938 52.1807786196 120% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 20.039408867 85% => OK
Sentence length: 17.5294117647 23.2022227129 76% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.804212704 57.7814097925 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.882352941 141.986410481 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5294117647 23.2022227129 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.588235294118 0.724660767414 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 3.58251231527 56% => OK
Readability: 45.0461902882 51.9672348444 87% => OK
Elegance: 1.48314606742 1.8405768891 81% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.297085070028 0.441005458295 67% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.119714164278 0.135418324435 88% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0887548216003 0.0829849096947 107% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.549675366984 0.58762219726 94% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.173566202869 0.147661913831 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115499969095 0.193483328276 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101187136815 0.0970749176394 104% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.196540690188 0.42659136922 46% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0556786975991 0.0774707102158 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165352094901 0.312017818177 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0639571892787 0.0698173142475 92% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.33743842365 96% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.87684729064 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.82512315271 62% => OK
Positive topic words: 6.0 6.46551724138 93% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 5.36822660099 56% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.82389162562 71% => OK
Total topic words: 11.0 14.657635468 75% => OK
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More content wanted. For issue essays, around 450 words, for argument essays, around 400 words.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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