In surveys Mason City residents rank water sports (swimming, boating and fishing) among their favorite recreational activities. The Mason River flowing through the city is rarely used for these pursuits, however, and the city park department devotes little of its budget to maintaining riverside recreational facilities. For years there have been complaints from residents about the quality of the river's water and the river's smell. In response, the state has recently announced plans to clean up Mason River. Use of the river for water sports is therefore sure to increase. The city government should for that reason devote more money in this year's budget to riverside recreational facilities.
The argument stating that the city government should devote more money in the budget to riverside recreational facilities is based on several undue assupmtions and is not found to be persuasive.
The first thing is that the argument assumes that the reason why the Mason river was rarely used for water sport activities was that it was dirty and that cleaning it up would expedite its use for those activities. It might be that the river wasn't used for these pursuits because of any other reasons, maybe it wasn't safe or their was a constraint on the amount of water that a city could use and so the city park department also allocated lesser budget for the maintainence of these activities. The passage only states that people liked water sports a lot and they might be involved in these recreational activities eleswhere. It isn't stated anywhere that they were dependent on river Mason for these activities. They only had a problem with its cleanliness and there are no evidences which would prove that the use of river water for water sports would increase. Had there been a clue which would interlink the importance of use of water from this particular river and growth in water sports activity as a result of this, the argument would have been more persuasive.
Even if we assume that the use of river water would increase for theses sport activities, the passage establishes that the state had announced plans to clean up the Mason river yielding to complaints of residents about the bad water quality and smell of the river. But, we cannot say when this task of cleaning up the river would be completed merely on the basis of announcement of plans. It may happen that other priorities turn up and this initative gets delayed for a very long time. In that case, it would not be fruitful do devote more money in the budget for these activaties. Only if some data supporting the implementation of this plan and timeline for this undertaking would have been provided, the argument could build a more convincing case.
The argument is hence flawed as it is based on several unwarranted assumptions and doesn't provide a very clear idea about why the use of river water would increase if the cleanliness initiative would be completed.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: The argument stating that the city government should devote more money in the budget to riverside recreational facilities is based on several undue assupmtions and is not found to be persuasive.
Error: assupmtions Suggestion: assumptions
Sentence: It might be that the river wasn't used for these pursuits because of any other reasons, maybe it wasn't safe or their was a constraint on the amount of water that a city could use and so the city park department also allocated lesser budget for the maintainence of these activities.
Error: maintainence Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: The passage only states that people liked water sports a lot and they might be involved in these recreational activities eleswhere.
Error: eleswhere Suggestion: elsewhere
Sentence: It may happen that other priorities turn up and this initative gets delayed for a very long time.
Error: initative Suggestion: initiative
Sentence: In that case, it would not be fruitful do devote more money in the budget for these activaties.
Error: activaties Suggestion: activities
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argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- not OK. to argue this:
For years there have been complaints from residents about the quality of the river's water and the river's smell.
we may argue like:
Those who complain the quality of water maybe are not residents who like water sports.
argument 3 -- you don't have, minimum 3 arguments wanted.
Need to argue against the conclusion always. For this topic it is:
Use of the river for water sports is therefore sure to increase. The city government should for that reason devote more money in this year's budget to riverside recreational facilities.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 391 350
No. of Characters: 1826 1500
No. of Different Words: 178 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.447 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.67 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.553 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 98 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 74 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 62 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 43 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 30.077 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.139 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.615 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.395 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.571 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.149 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 243, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wasn't
... activities. It might be that the river wasnt used for these pursuits because of any ...
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Line 3, column 311, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s because of any other reasons, maybe it wasnt safe or their was a constraint on ...
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Line 3, column 313, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wasn't
...because of any other reasons, maybe it wasnt safe or their was a constraint on the a...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 633, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: isn't
...e recreational activities eleswhere. It isnt stated anywhere that they were dependen...
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Line 7, column 84, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
... on several unwarranted assumptions and doesnt provide a very clear idea about why the...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, may, so, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 28.8173652695 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 55.5748502994 67% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1857.0 2260.96107784 82% => OK
No of words: 387.0 441.139720559 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.7984496124 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59748923067 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 204.123752495 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.462532299742 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 595.8 705.55239521 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.8473053892 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 61.3792170366 57.8364921388 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.846153846 119.503703932 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.7692307692 23.324526521 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.76923076923 5.70786347227 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.277822161345 0.218282227539 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108857058181 0.0743258471296 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0784650803452 0.0701772020484 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150102537139 0.128457276422 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0953867521206 0.0628817314937 152% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 14.3799401198 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 98.500998004 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.1389221557 122% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.