"Ten years ago our company had two new regional office buildings built in two different regions. The buildings were erected by two different construction companies - Alpha and Zeta. Even though the two buildings had virtually identical floor plans, the building constructed by Zeta cost 30 percent more to build, and its expenses for maintenance last year were twice those of the building constructed by Alpha. Furthermore, the energy consumption of the Zeta building has been higher than that of the Alpha building every year since its construction. Such data, plus the fact that Alpha has a stable workforce with little employee turnover, indicate that we should use Alpha Construction Company, rather than Zeta, for all future building projects."
The above argument states that a large company had two new buildings constructed in different regions erected by different construction companies namely Alpha and Zeta. The arguer provides certain evidences supporting why Zeta is more promising construction company than Alpha and they should hire Zeta for new building projects. The arguer compared the overall cost considering several factors and the stability of workforce. However, the evidences provided by arguer are vague and doesn’t sound plausible.
Firstly, arguer claims that company should hire Zeta rather than Alpha for their new building project. Arguer compares the building cost, maintenance cost and electricity consumption. There are certain loopholes in this argument. The arguer tells that Zeta requires 30 percent more to build but didn’t specifies the expenditure. Also, in span of ten years, nothing can be stated precisely as the Alpha construction company might have raised their cost and Zeta have still remained intact with their prices. Hence the evidences are vague.
Further, arguer takes into account the electricity consumption and maintenance cost of both construction companies. However, arguer compared maintenance cost of last year of buildings which were built 10 year ago. There might other reasons for increasing maintenance cost of Alpha. Alpha might be equipped with more new machines and also its workforce might be comparatively more and thus its maintenance cost have increased. Also, the sum of maintenance cost plus electricity consumption might be less than the cost of building of Alpha and hence this contrasts the argument. Hence this argument also lacks in evidence.
Lastly, the Zeta had been provided priority for construction of new projects on the grounds of the stability of workforce. This argument is completely unreasonable as how a workforce can be a medium for comparing two construction company. There might be possibility that Zeta may have less employees and that’s why the majority of employees didn’t left the company. The latter might also be the reason for maintenance and electricity cost.
Lastly, arguer had provided certain evidences in support of Zeta over Alpha for construction of new projects. But the grounds on which they are compared are plausible. For choosing the better construction company, they should be compared on the basis of overall maintenance cost in the span of 10 years(in this case), on the basis of durability i.e. how they can withstand against extreme weather conditions, how many amenities they provides and along with workforce stability.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 405 350
No. of Characters: 2142 1500
No. of Different Words: 167 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.486 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.289 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.77 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 154 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 127 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 95 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 65 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.609 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.277 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.609 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.331 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.506 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.087 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 331, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ld hire Zeta for new building projects. The arguer compared the overall cost consid...
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Line 2, column 512, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...till remained intact with their prices. Hence the evidences are vague. Further, argu...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 577, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
... and hence this contrasts the argument. Hence this argument also lacks in evidence. ...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 286, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun employees is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...might be possibility that Zeta may have less employees and that's why the major...
^^^^
Line 5, column 379, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...lity i.e. how they can withstand against extreme weather conditions, how many ame...
^^
Line 5, column 433, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'provide'
Suggestion: provide
...her conditions, how many amenities they provides and along with workforce stability. ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nd along with workforce stability.
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, lastly, may, so, still, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 55.5748502994 70% => OK
Nominalization: 25.0 16.3942115768 152% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2217.0 2260.96107784 98% => OK
No of words: 402.0 441.139720559 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.51492537313 5.12650576532 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87995786824 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 204.123752495 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.430348258706 0.468620217663 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 674.1 705.55239521 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 57.5393676362 57.8364921388 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.3913043478 119.503703932 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4782608696 23.324526521 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.26086956522 5.70786347227 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 6.88822355289 189% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225999076894 0.218282227539 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0747826198197 0.0743258471296 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.109654019675 0.0701772020484 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147705169077 0.128457276422 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100852779048 0.0628817314937 160% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.38 12.5979740519 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 98.500998004 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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