Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia. Using an observation-centered approach to studying Tertian culture, he concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. Recently another anthropologist, Dr. Karp, visited the group of islands that includes Tertia and used the interview-centered method to study child-rearing practices. In the interviews that Dr. Karp conducted with children living in this group of islands, the children spent much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. Dr. Karp decided that Dr. Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture must be invalid. Some anthropologists recommend that to obtain accurate information on Tertian child-rearing practices, future research on the subject should be conducted via the interview-centered method.
Although the argument seems to be persuasive, it makes number of unwarranted assumptions. basically it cites several instances of poor reasoning and ill-defined terminology.The author makes the unwarranted assumptions by citing two approaches. The author distorts the view of the situation by manipulating the facts and by providing weak examples. Taken as a whole the unstated assumptions render the argument highly suspect. Indeed, if the assumptions do not hold true, then the argument totally falls apart. Therefore the argument regarding the two approaches might fall apart. The argument basically states that one approached used has many flaws as the result shown is not accurate that is observation-centered approach and the another approach used provides the better germane result that is interview-centered method.
First the argument readily cites that approach used by the a noted anthropologist Dr field was an observation-centered approach to study Tertian culture he founds the result that the children were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents as this approach was done twenty years ago but today as the process was conducted by Dr karp he found the result that the children spent much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. The argument would have been more convincing if author would have provided some evidence regarding this statement.
secondly, it is cited in argument that the approach of observation-centered was done Twenty year ago and at that time conditions would been different as compared to today’ s life-style of humanbiengs at that time everyperson were more gregarious as today so it would have posssible that children were been renderd by entire village this claim of children spent much more time talking about their biological parents would have been more convincing if have been provided with some strong evidence.
Finally the author claims that the Dr karp visited the island and got something different result as compared to the Dr fields analysis. As it can been cited that the Drfield visited only Tertia Island and Dr krap visited the group of the Island which included the Tertia island it might been more convincing if author would have been provided with more evidence regarding the visited Island, there might have been chance of children would have talked about their biological parents and the approach used by the dr karp was something different as used by the Dr fields approach. So to bolster it further, the author must provide with concrete evidence perhaps by reliable detailed analysis.
In conclusion, it is difficult to support the authors recommedation based on the provided evidence . It could be considerably strengthened if author clearly mentioned all the pertinent facts.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 448 350
No. of Characters: 2345 1500
No. of Different Words: 196 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.601 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.234 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.923 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 173 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 132 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 100 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 55 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 32 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 26.156 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.714 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.344 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.605 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.151 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...arly mentioned all the pertinent facts.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, as to, in conclusion, talking about
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 55.5748502994 74% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2392.0 2260.96107784 106% => OK
No of words: 447.0 441.139720559 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35123042506 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59808378696 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00591665172 2.78398813304 108% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.440715883669 0.468620217663 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 733.5 705.55239521 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.8473053892 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 152.949519632 57.8364921388 264% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 159.466666667 119.503703932 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.8 23.324526521 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.33333333333 5.70786347227 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 25.0 5.25449101796 476% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.27607286763 0.218282227539 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0654182394465 0.0743258471296 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.105155584729 0.0701772020484 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14060058188 0.128457276422 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.111143815991 0.0628817314937 177% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.7 14.3799401198 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 48.3550499002 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.197005988 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.34 12.5979740519 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 98.500998004 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 12.3882235529 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.1389221557 122% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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