Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia. Using an observation-centered approach to studying Tertian culture, he concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. Recently another anthropologist, Dr. Karp, visited the group of islands that includes Tertia and used the interview-centered method to study child-rearing practices. In the interviews that Dr. Karp conducted with children living in this group of islands, the children spent much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. Dr. Karp decided that Dr. Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture must be invalid. Some anthropologists recommend that to obtain accurate information on Tertian child-rearing practices, future research on the subject should be conducted via the interviewcentered method.
In the above argument the author Dr. Karp says that the study of Dr. Field which conculded that the children where reared by entire village is false because according to his interview-centered expremient it proved contrary of what Dr. Field concluded. However the conclustion drawn by the anthripologist does not hold water,it rest on several unfounded assumptions if not substantiated might weaken the persusive argument. Thus following are three question which must be answered.
Fisrt, How are observation-centered approch and interview-centered approch different from each other? It may be possible that the two approches rely on same method but the inference is different. Because of which they reached a different conclusion. The author must specify what is the method, and how the approches are different from each other. It may be possible that the observation-centered approch consist the interview gathering of various testcases and observation is concluded upon them. The methodology of each of approch must be specified in detail. If any of the above scenario proves to be true the argumrnt is significantly hampered.
Second, Was the test cases count equal in both the approches? As mention by the author Dr. field only visited the island Tertia whereas Dr. Karp visited the group of island that included Tertia. It may be possible that Dr. Karp mistook the Tertia island for another and tested on some other island. It may be possible that Dr. Field conducted test on adults whereas Dr. Karp conducted tests on children. this changes the scope of the test. Perhaps author must specify the test cases and the inferences receached from each testcases. If any of the above scenario proves to be holds water the argument is weaken
Third, What are the other approches to reach the conclusion? As the two approches mention in the article are considered now the other anthropologist should approch the expremient with different approches other than the two mention in the artile.It may be possible that they reach a more conclusion end after considering other approches. If any of the above cases proves to be true then the argumnt is significatly hampered.
The author must provide more data to the above questions
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 9 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 17 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 363 350
No. of Characters: 1834 1500
No. of Different Words: 159 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.365 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.052 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.972 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 126 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 98 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 69 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 50 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.15 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.541 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.65 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.32 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.522 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.083 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 253, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...d contrary of what Dr. Field concluded. However the conclustion drawn by the anthripolo...
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Line 1, column 324, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , it
...y the anthripologist does not hold water,it rest on several unfounded assumptions i...
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Line 1, column 328, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'rests'?
Suggestion: rests
...e anthripologist does not hold water,it rest on several unfounded assumptions if not...
^^^^
Line 3, column 197, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... method but the inference is different. Because of which they reached a different concl...
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Line 3, column 562, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...of approch must be specified in detail. If any of the above scenario proves to be ...
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Line 5, column 405, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...s Dr. Karp conducted tests on children. this changes the scope of the test. Perhaps ...
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Line 5, column 534, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ferences receached from each testcases. If any of the above scenario proves to be ...
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Line 7, column 246, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: It
...ther than the two mention in the artile.It may be possible that they reach a more ...
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Line 7, column 338, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... end after considering other approches. If any of the above cases proves to be tru...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, second, so, then, third, thus, whereas
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 55.5748502994 76% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1875.0 2260.96107784 83% => OK
No of words: 361.0 441.139720559 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19390581717 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03439308241 2.78398813304 109% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 204.123752495 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.462603878116 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 568.8 705.55239521 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 61.2154188093 57.8364921388 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.75 119.503703932 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.05 23.324526521 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.05 5.70786347227 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.67664670659 278% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161917313686 0.218282227539 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.048635738118 0.0743258471296 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0730960678625 0.0701772020484 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0799487302261 0.128457276422 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0624013009703 0.0628817314937 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 14.3799401198 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 98.500998004 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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