"Two years ago, the nearby town of Ocean View built a new municipal golf course and resort hotel. During the past two years, tourism in Ocean View has increased, new businesses have opened there, and Ocean View's tax revenues have risen by 30 percent. Therefore, the best way to improve Hopewell's economy—and generate additional tax revenues—is to build a golf course and resort hotel similar to those in Ocean View."
The whole argument of author that opening up an golf course and resort hotel similar to those in ocean view can boost up economy of Hopewell does not stand very strong due to some unstated assumptions which authhor makes. The whole argument put forward by author lacks very important evidences whithout which this argument will fall like house of cards.
The very first loop hole in argument is that author states example of Ocean view town which built a municipal golf course and resort hotel two years back and attributes new businesses that opened up during that period and rise in tourism to them. author fails to acknowledge other factory which could have led to increased in tourism like opening up of night safari, amusement park etcetara, and increase in revenue canot be soley attributed to increase in tourism, ther eis possibilty that many new corporate office may have opened up which led to increase in revenue 30 precent.
secondly, author fails to acknowledge that opening of golf course resort and hotel may not be as succesfull as it was in Ocean View town, because successs of resolt and hotel depends on many factor like climate, beaches etcetra. It is possible that Ocean view city has other monuments to which tourist can visit during their stay at resort which might no the the case with town Hopewell. So just copying idea superficialy whithout any through investigation could lead to economic disaster for hopewell town, it is higly possilbe that Hopewell might be very good place for business so opening up a business park whould be more benificial rather than a hotel or resort.
Another very important evidence which this argument lacks is mentioning of current economic situation of town Hopewell, It is possible that tourism is very good in that town and it already have sufficient amount of resort and golf course, so opening up a new one would not only increase cometition but also be bad for business, and rather that new business coming up, existing one might close.
So at last this argument lacks some very key evidences because of which this argument becomes untenable and a through review and investigation of idea and argumen is required in order to make this argumen fool proof other wise it will be blown in thin air by authorities.
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- "Two years ago, the nearby town of Ocean View built a new municipal golf course and resort hotel. During the past two years, tourism in Ocean View has increased, new businesses have opened there, and Ocean View's tax revenues have risen by 30 pe 77
- Claim: Many problems of modern society cannot be solved by laws and the legal system.Reason: Laws cannot change what is in people's hearts or minds.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the 50
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 9 15
No. of Words: 388 350
No. of Characters: 1861 1500
No. of Different Words: 189 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.438 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.796 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.391 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 128 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 96 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 62 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 27 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 43.111 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 20.513 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.471 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.775 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.193 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 46, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...hole argument of author that opening up an golf course and resort hotel similar to...
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Line 1, column 141, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...an view can boost up economy of Hopewell does not stand very strong due to some u...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...gument will fall like house of cards. The very first loop hole in argument is tha...
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Line 3, column 139, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...a municipal golf course and resort hotel two years back and attributes new busine...
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Line 3, column 249, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Author
...hat period and rise in tourism to them. author fails to acknowledge other factory whic...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Secondly
...ed to increase in revenue 30 precent. secondly, author fails to acknowledge that openi...
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Line 5, column 353, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...during their stay at resort which might no the the case with town Hopewell. So jus...
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Line 5, column 356, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...ing their stay at resort which might no the the case with town Hopewell. So just copyin...
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Line 5, column 356, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...ing their stay at resort which might no the the case with town Hopewell. So just copyin...
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Line 7, column 190, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'has'?
Suggestion: has
...s very good in that town and it already have sufficient amount of resort and golf co...
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Line 9, column 111, Rule ID: THROUGH_THOROUGH[1]
Message: Did you mean 'thorough' (accurate, exhaustive)?
Suggestion: thorough
...h this argument becomes untenable and a through review and investigation of idea and ar...
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Line 9, column 217, Rule ID: OTHER_WISE_OTHERWISE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'otherwise'?
Suggestion: otherwise
...n order to make this argumen fool proof other wise it will be blown in thin air by authori...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 13.6137724551 147% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 55.5748502994 99% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1893.0 2260.96107784 84% => OK
No of words: 388.0 441.139720559 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87886597938 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43821085614 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43367078314 2.78398813304 87% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 204.123752495 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.492268041237 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 607.5 705.55239521 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 19.7664670659 46% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 43.0 22.8473053892 188% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 76.3806258157 57.8364921388 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 210.333333333 119.503703932 176% => OK
Words per sentence: 43.1111111111 23.324526521 185% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.88888888889 5.70786347227 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.25449101796 228% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.20758483034 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.273524391384 0.218282227539 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.134464231273 0.0743258471296 181% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110641230095 0.0701772020484 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151162510318 0.128457276422 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102330759211 0.0628817314937 163% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 23.1 14.3799401198 161% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 27.83 48.3550499002 58% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 20.1 12.197005988 165% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.91 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 98.500998004 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 12.3882235529 149% => OK
gunning_fog: 19.2 11.1389221557 172% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 11.9071856287 160% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.