The vice president of human resources at Climpson Industries sent the following recommendation to the company's president.
"In an effort to improve our employees' productivity, we should implement electronic monitoring of employees' Internet use from their workstations.
Employees who use the Internet from their workstations need to be identified and punished if we are to reduce the number of work hours spent on personal or recreational activities, such as shopping or playing games. By installing software to detect employees' Internet use on company computers, we can prevent employees from wasting time, foster a better work ethic at Climpson, and improve our overall profits."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The argument above presents an idea that initially may appear very logical. It argues that by detecting and punishing employees for using the internet on company computers, the number of work hours used for personal activities by employees will decrease. As a result of this change, the argument concludes that employees will no longer waste time, and work ethic and profits for the company will be improved. However, this argument makes several rash assumptions that make this argument illogical.
Firstly, the argument states that all employees who use the internet at their workstations should be punished in order to reduce work hours spent on personal activities, and therefore assumes that all usage of the internet at work must be spent on personal activities. However, this ignores all other uses of the internet that could potentially be beneficial for employees at work. The internet could be used by employees in a variety of ways, including to fact check, advertise for the company, or get contact information for business partners. This type of internet usage could bring potential benefits to the company, which contradicts the argument's conclusion that less internet usage would lead to increased work ethic and profits.
Additionally, the argument naively assumes that by having their employees spend less time on personal activities, the company's profits will increase. While this may initially seem logical, it is not necessarily practical in use. Many people benefit from having small, personal breaks that help them to clear their mind and focus better. By having small breaks, this could allow employees to potentially become more productive during the times that they are dedicating to work purposes. In turn, this could lead to better profits for the company. Additionally, allowing employees the freedom to use the internet for some personal use could help employees to feel more comfortable and content in their positions. Having strict rules could lead to the unintended consequence of unhappy employees, which could reduce motivation and work ethic throughout the office. Once again, this directly contradicts the argument that stricter enforcement of the internet would lead to increased work ethic and profits.
Finally, the entire premise of this argument rests on the fact that the software being used to monitor internet usage is accurate and reliable. If these assumptions are not true, which the argument provides no clear evidence that they are, then employees could be wrongly punished for things that they may not have done. Imposing incorrect accusations on employees could worsen the working environment in the office, and therefore decrease productivity, work ethic, and profits.
Overall, while the argument presented above may seem partially logical, it has far too many gaps and assumptions to be undeniably persuasive. The argument fails to consider how this new policy will affect its employees in practical use, and fails to consider how the internet may be potentially bringing benefits to the company. Before the company implements this policy at work, they should create a more sound argument that is evidence-based in order to be more persuasive in convincing their employees of how this policy will benefit them and the company.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 517 350
No. of Characters: 2709 1500
No. of Different Words: 216 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.768 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.24 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.64 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 198 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 164 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 126 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 73 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.038 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.353 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.532 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.113 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 644, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'arguments'' or 'argument's'?
Suggestion: arguments'; argument's
...s to the company, which contradicts the arguments conclusion that less internet usage wou...
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Line 7, column 480, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... productivity, work ethic, and profits. Overall, while the argument presented ab...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, so, then, therefore, while, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 26.0 12.9520958084 201% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 13.6137724551 147% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 28.8173652695 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 55.5748502994 104% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2775.0 2260.96107784 123% => OK
No of words: 517.0 441.139720559 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.36750483559 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76839952204 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71375858021 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 204.123752495 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.441005802708 0.468620217663 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 855.0 705.55239521 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.67365269461 358% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.2935240256 57.8364921388 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.136363636 119.503703932 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5 23.324526521 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.72727272727 5.70786347227 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171785755717 0.218282227539 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0645709185506 0.0743258471296 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0515429721225 0.0701772020484 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114831479083 0.128457276422 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.021645978353 0.0628817314937 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 14.3799401198 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 48.3550499002 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 12.5979740519 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 98.500998004 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.