The vice president of human resources at Climpson Industries sent the following recommendation to the company's president.
"In an effort to improve our employees' productivity, we should implement electronic monitoring of employees' Internet use from their workstations. Employees who use the Internet from their workstations need to be identified and punished if we are to reduce the number of work hours spent on personal or recreational activities, such as shopping or playing games. By installing software to detect employees' Internet use on company computers, we can prevent employees from wasting time, foster a better work ethic at Climpson, and improve our overall profits."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The vice president of human resources at Climpson Industries recommends installing software to detect employees’ Internet use on company computers. He/she believes this will prevent employees from wasting time, foster a better work ethic at Climpson, and improve overall profits. This is based on the premise that employees need to reduce the number of hours spent on personal or recreational activities while using the internet from their workstations. However, there are some assumptions that must be proven true in order for this argument to be fully evaluated.
First of all, the vice president of human resources makes the assumption that the employees who spend the most time using the internet at their workstation for personal or recreational activities contribute the least to the company. It is possible though that these are in fact the best employees at Climpson Industries due to the work being so easy for them, they finish it with time to spare to use the internet at their own leisure. In congruence with this idea, it could be that the employees who strictly use the internet at their workstations for company related tasks are struggling with their assignments and contributing less to Climpson Industries profit margins overall. If either of these scenarios are deemed factual, the recommendation made to the president by human resources would be highly downgraded.
Secondly, the vice president of human resources bases his/her conclusion on the assumption that punishing employees who use the internet for personal or recreational activities is an effective tool for increased productivity and company morale. However, what if employees grimace at the notion of being constantly monitored while using the internet work, and thus begin to dislike working for Climpson Industries. If this sentiment among the employees grows, they could possibly form a union and protest working until the regulations on internet detection are withdrawn. Either of these situation would dramatically decrease the productivity and morale among the employees, and greatly weaken the recommendation of human resources.
In conclusion, the argument as it currently stands remains fatally flawed due to the unproven assumptions I have listed above. If the vice president of human resources were to somehow provide evidence that would make these assumptions believably true, his/her argument would then be able to be fully evaluated
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 380 350
No. of Characters: 2018 1500
No. of Different Words: 183 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.415 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.311 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.866 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 145 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 125 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 98 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 70 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.143 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.09 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.714 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.386 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.577 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.136 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
The vice president of human resources at...
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Line 1, column 133, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (Internet) must be used with a third-person verb: 'uses'.
Suggestion: uses
...ware to detect employees' Internet use on company computers. He/she believes t...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...this argument to be fully evaluated. First of all, the vice president of huma...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...esources would be highly downgraded. Secondly, the vice president of human re...
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Line 5, column 470, Rule ID: MAY_COULD_POSSIBLY[1]
Message: Use simply 'could'.
Suggestion: could
...ntiment among the employees grows, they could possibly form a union and protest working until ...
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Line 5, column 587, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this situation' or 'these situations'?
Suggestion: this situation; these situations
...rnet detection are withdrawn. Either of these situation would dramatically decrease the product...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e recommendation of human resources. In conclusion, the argument as it curren...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, thus, while, in conclusion, in fact, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2068.0 2260.96107784 91% => OK
No of words: 377.0 441.139720559 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.48541114058 5.12650576532 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95197698414 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 204.123752495 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498673740053 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 634.5 705.55239521 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.1402541569 57.8364921388 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.714285714 119.503703932 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.9285714286 23.324526521 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.28571428571 5.70786347227 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208443001316 0.218282227539 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0886991478002 0.0743258471296 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0688237306043 0.0701772020484 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139310966 0.128457276422 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0517519537324 0.0628817314937 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.9 14.3799401198 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 48.3550499002 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.197005988 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.86 12.5979740519 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.11 8.32208582834 109% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 98.500998004 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.