“In an attempt to improve highway safety, Prunty County last year lowered its speed limit from 55 to 45 miles per hour on all county highways. But this effort has failed: the number of accidents has not decreased, and, based on reports by the highway patrol, many drivers are exceeding the speed limit. Prunty County should instead undertake the same kind of road improvement project that Butler County completed five years ago: increasing lane widths, resurfacing rough highways, and improving visibility at dangerous intersections. Today, major Butler County roads still have a 55 mph speed limit, yet there were 25 percent fewer reported accidents in Butler County this past year than there were five years ago.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.”
This piece of information, though interesting, is nonetheless not very convincing.More information is required to substantiate the claim. Author states that prunty country last year lowered the speed limit from 55 to 45 mph which led all efforts to fiasco and also states that their were no decrements in number of accidents according to the reports by the highway patrol,But more evidences are required about reports which were generated whether reports were based on number of accidents occurring monthly,yearly or of few weeks.Author also speaks about the many drivers are exceeding speed limits,he does not give exact number of drivers who are exceeding their speed limits,their can be 10,100 or 1000.
Firstly,Author has stated about lowering of speed limits,but their could be other reasons for accidents,such as lack of well trained drivers,drunken drivers,drivers not well acquainted to traffic rules,narrow roads,not good roads could be possible.further the reports which were generated were recent or were old.
Next,the author speaks about the project that butler country completed five years ago and suggests prunty country to undertake the same kind of road improvement project,which involves increasing lane widths,resurfacing rough highways and improving visibility at dangerous intersections.But butler country and prunty country might have different circumstances and cannot be compared.The fact may rather be that prunty country possessed more good project than butler country and lane width could be large and no need for increment,highways could be smooth.On what basis author is talking about adopting butler project?Does lane width of prunty country was less than butler country?both lane widths were measured?does he knows what kind of material was used for both highways?
Furthermore,Author speaks about the speed limit of butler country roads which is same as before.But what was the speed limit before it can be less than 55 mph or can be more than it.further 25 percent fewer accidents were reported in butler country for this past year,25 percent of what 100 or 1000 or 10000 accidents no clear value is provided.So Finally more evidences are required to convince the reader.
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Sentence: Author also speaks about the many drivers are exceeding speed limits, he does not give exact number of drivers who are exceeding their speed limits, their can be 10, 100 or 1000.
Description: A determiner, possessive is not usually followed by a modal auxillary
Suggestion: Refer to their and can
Sentence: Firstly, Author has stated about lowering of speed limits, but their could be other reasons for accidents, such as lack of well trained drivers, drunken drivers, drivers not well acquainted to traffic rules, narrow roads, not good roads could be possible.
Description: A determiner, possessive is not usually followed by a modal auxillary
Suggestion: Refer to their and could
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Always put a space after punctuation marks. E-rater is sensitive.
The content is not well organized. Better like this:
para 1: introduction. (Don't need to list reasons here)
para 2: reason 1
para 3: reason 2
para 4: reason 3 (optional)
para 5: conclusion
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No. of Words: 368 350
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Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.38 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.965 4.6
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Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
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Sentence Length SD: 16.135 7.5
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Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.57 0.50
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