give letter to editor in business perodical want tell that their are two type of tension or stress in two category
In the give letter to editor in business perodical want tell that their are two type of tension or stress in two category , one is pepole from the lower economic which have higher stress in their life and second is the top of corporate leader. so to less their stress in thier life the author sugesst the way that they both are come together and share their problem know as SABBATICLA. But here raise lots of quetions on authr recommendation . Writer not provided strong evideneces to support this statemet .
Firstly ,the pepole who belong to lower economic are realted to stress disease. but here question is arise is that, Is this study is by scientic? How many pepole consider in this study? the people in this study is allready suffering from any disease ? all this factor are matter here beacuse if study is conducted only that people which are allready suffer from thia type disease then the result of this anlysis is meanigless. Author have to provide all information about study.
Secondly, The study is conducted inthe Wild baboons in Africa. Study is realted how many person in the Africa? Stress disease study is only done in Africa peole. is only one country study is sufficent to make conclusion? because in other country the suitation may be diffrent.
More ever author conclude that sabbatical help to stimulate economic productivity in both as well. but not mention How it will work? which is not mention. How it will effect both ?
All this question author have to answer to make this conlusion more powerful.
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Sentence: Firstly ,the pepole who belong to lower economic are realted to stress disease. but here question is arise is that, Is this study is by scientic?
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Sentence: In the give letter to editor in business perodical want tell that their are two type of tension or stress in two category , one is pepole from the lower economic which have higher stress in their life and second is the top of corporate leader. so to less their stress in thier life the author sugesst the way that they both are come together and share their problem know as SABBATICLA.
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Sentence: But here raise lots of quetions on authr recommendation .
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Sentence: Firstly ,the pepole who belong to lower economic are realted to stress disease. but here question is arise is that, Is this study is by scientic?
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Sentence: How many pepole consider in this study? the people in this study is allready suffering from any disease ? all this factor are matter here beacuse if study is conducted only that people which are allready suffer from thia type disease then the result of this anlysis is meanigless.
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Sentence: Secondly, The study is conducted inthe Wild baboons in Africa.
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Sentence: Study is realted how many person in the Africa?
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Sentence: Stress disease study is only done in Africa peole. is only one country study is sufficent to make conclusion? because in other country the suitation may be diffrent.
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Sentence: All this question author have to answer to make this conlusion more powerful.
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