"In any enterprise, the process of making or doing something is ultimately more important than the final product."
Discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the opinion expressed above. Support your point of view with reasons and/or examples from your own experience, observations, or reading.
The given statement tells us that in any enterprise, the process of making or doing something is ultimately more important than the final product whereas the opposite holds true that the final product is more important than the process of making or doing something. This statement comes across as an overt generalization in which certain words have been used indiscriminately which significantly hampers the efficacy of the statement. The statement becomes extrapolative in nature which is the main reason as to why as a reader one cannot agree with the sentiment expressed.
To begin with the statement is very generalized in nature because to the world, the result is what matters more than the process of making or doing something. The process is important but the final product is what everyone appreciates. Nobody cares about the hard work or the struggles behind if there is no end result. If we take the example of a shoemaker, no matter how much hard work the shoe maker puts in but it will only be fruitful if the end product is good.
Additionally, it is the human nature that we do things only if we know that there is going to be some result afterwards. If we know that there isn't going to be any final product, the motivation to work towards it decreases. When students prepare for the exams, it is difficult at the time of the preparation but they tend to forget all the struggles once they get good marks or the desired result. So, the final product is what matters instead of the process.
Further, the comparison of what is more important is used in a wrong sense here. The process of making or doing something is important because that's what shapes the final product but it is not more important than the final product. If in any enterprise there is no final product the process of making or doing something would not make any sense. The enterprise won't be able to sell things based on how much hard work is put in the process if the end product is not worthy enough.
Therefore, we can conclude that by ignoring the factors that are very important to the assessment of the statement holistically. The issue becomes redundant in nature and makes it subjective and on purely logical grounds we can't agree with the sentiment expressed above.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Therefore,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, therefore, whereas, as to, to begin with, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.5258426966 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 58.6224719101 70% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1848.0 2235.4752809 83% => OK
No of words: 396.0 442.535393258 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.66666666667 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57938939837 2.79657885939 92% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 215.323595506 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.414141414141 0.4932671777 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 594.0 704.065955056 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 6.24550561798 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 20.2370786517 5% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 396.0 23.0359550562 1719% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 60.3974514979 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 1848.0 118.986275619 1553% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 396.0 23.4991977007 1685% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 67.0 5.21951772744 1284% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 7.80617977528 141% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 10.2758426966 10% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.376192263781 0.243740707755 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.376192263781 0.0831039109588 453% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0758088955206 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.214236416742 0.150359130593 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.109869113498 0.0667264976115 165% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 198.6 14.1392134831 1405% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -322.0 48.8420337079 -659% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 7.92365168539 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 156.5 12.1743820225 1285% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 11.29 12.1639044944 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 25.47 8.38706741573 304% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 55.0 100.480337079 55% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 58.0 11.8971910112 488% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 160.4 11.2143820225 1430% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 157.0 11.7820224719 1333% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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