The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industries, or other fields is by instilling a sense of cooperation not competition
The argument and conclusion made by the parent here are strikingly fascinating. The speaker states that the change of cafeteria vendors to private hygienic, healthy food preparation ones which some students are not like, turn out to spoil the health of students themselves. Ironically, the parent here condemns the principal that the intent behind hiring the Swift Nutrition is apparently lost, and asks to make that clear. The amusement behind the argument made is that the parent himself asks the principal to compromise the quality of intake of his one child.
The argument here is abstruse, if any child doesn't like any healthy and hygienic food, any parent should convenience that particular child to pursue it in order to achieve their fitness and stability (physical and mental). For example, for these kinds of relatable arguments, personal experience will be very helpful. Many of the children studying in school will take time to know or gain some cognizance in terms of what to eat and what not, then any parent either forces them to eat healthy food and time being he knows the advantages or some wise ones indemnifies with their kids in a thoughtful way which nurtures their present and future. Otherwise leaving them to eat the stink can be adulterated and problematic down the lane.
On the other hand, many can misunderstand the above-stated example as impeding consent. That was not at all intending that, ironically, so was the principal's intention. Here, if the students get addicted to any junk food instead of the healthy is served by the cafeteria, they eventually will incline to buy some other junk no matter how many times the cafeteria menu or vendors change. Thus explaining to them or making them understand the value of the food available by allowing them for controlled junk food occasionally will do the deed. Abstaining will be a mistake but providing children the data of the consequences and letting them realize what they have signed up for is a wise step to be followed by any parent or guardian.
In sum, I wittily disprove the conclusion drawn from the particular argument mentioned by the same self. If possible inspire or turn the mindset of children towards generosity and respect for survival. Which in turn aids them in succeeding or reaching their chosen livelihood. And I solemnly request the principal of the Kensington academy to stand on his word and I uphold with principal's intractability on this corresponding issue. As many said strong person create comfortable times that produces weak personalities. So, acknowledge the thin line between love and comfy before treating their respective children.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 45, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...argument here is abstruse, if any child doesnt like any healthy and hygienic food, any...
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Line 2, column 582, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a thoughtful way" with adverb for "thoughtful"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...e wise ones indemnifies with their kids in a thoughtful way which nurtures their present and future...
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Line 2, column 643, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Otherwise,
...hich nurtures their present and future. Otherwise leaving them to eat the stink can be ad...
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Line 2, column 733, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...lterated and problematic down the lane. On the other hand, many can misunderstan...
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Line 3, column 148, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'principals'' or 'principal's'?
Suggestion: principals'; principal's
... intending that, ironically, so was the principals intention. Here, if the students get ad...
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Line 4, column 435, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...actability on this corresponding issue. As many said strong person create comforta...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, but, if, so, then, thus, for example, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 58.6224719101 96% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2214.0 2235.4752809 99% => OK
No of words: 437.0 442.535393258 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06636155606 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57214883401 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78019700078 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 215.323595506 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549199084668 0.4932671777 111% => OK
syllable_count: 693.9 704.065955056 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.8582088684 60.3974514979 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.526315789 118.986275619 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 23.4991977007 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.52631578947 5.21951772744 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0656404154999 0.243740707755 27% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0210627015263 0.0831039109588 25% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0340389405631 0.0758088955206 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.038432740157 0.150359130593 26% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0195063467381 0.0667264976115 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.1639044944 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 100.480337079 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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