"The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition." - Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or dis

I believe cooperation and competition both play a pivotal role in development of citizens and country. Among these two, cooperation is suitable for a country to prepare its young citizens for leadership in prominent sectors. However, competition also serves the best to develop an individual while with few negative impacts. Where as cooperation also have disadvantages when compared with other tool they are negligible.

Firstly, parents should insist cooperation in their children from school age. Where as today' s worlds from childhood mainly deals with competition this should be eradicated. A child will be successful and help others to succeed by cooperation not by competition. Now- a- days in field of education cooperation is being neglected as a result people are in a dilemma that sharing one' s own knowledge or views may result in deception. Working together from child hood builds social relationship and helps to finish a task quickly or with in a short span. To give a clear idea, a child in a school was given an assignment on a topic on which he have no idea, he do not find a teacher to clarify his doubt after his school time. By approaching his friend is the best way to clarify his doubt this aid him to finish his work soon.

Another point to consider is cooperation aid to develop motivation. For example, we all know that Apple products are manufactured in China. China and America economic development depends on cooperation. Development of smart phone market in America will help China to strengthen its economy by means of providing employments for manufacturing of these smart phones.

Thirdly, competition between individuals and companies might result in rivalry. To illustrate, recently an employee was brutally murdered by his colleague because of stealing his idea. Mainly India' s private sector pay huge amount of money to the people who come up with innovative ideas. The one who murdered his colleague has an innovative idea and that has been discussed among two of them, the one who heard his idea informed about the innovation to his superior by claiming it was his own idea as a result the owner of innovation murdered him.

In conclusion, cooperation must be insisted to youth because this can help not only one' s development but also country' s development. This should not be same in all fields while in sports competition is the best tool to be followed. A fine balance in cooperation and competition helps individuals to sustain smoothly in the society.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, so, then, third, thirdly, while, as to, for example, in conclusion, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 33.0505617978 97% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 58.6224719101 111% => OK
Nominalization: 29.0 12.9106741573 225% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2091.0 2235.4752809 94% => OK
No of words: 418.0 442.535393258 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0023923445 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92753865725 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 215.323595506 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533492822967 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 660.6 704.065955056 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.740449438202 270% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.5947718452 60.3974514979 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.0454545455 118.986275619 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 23.4991977007 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.63636363636 5.21951772744 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0942234696224 0.243740707755 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0283344896829 0.0831039109588 34% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.040016209641 0.0758088955206 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0536132577368 0.150359130593 36% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0320103240783 0.0667264976115 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 14.1392134831 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 100.480337079 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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