The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
A great leader is someone who is eloquent, articulate and coorperative. The author's posit that the best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or in any other field is by inculcating the sense of cooperation, not competition seems plausible. Mahathma Gandhi is a paragon of such leader who has a sense of coorperation and he helped India to change its history.
A great leader should be free any hostile feeling, he should be serene and free from any inmincial feelings. As aferomentioned, this will develop because of the competition they will be facing. Let's say, there are two or three individuals fighting against each other to get elected for the president in college election. Every individual will try to do their best in order to win, they will be facing neck to neck compition from other candidates. And due to the fear of losing they may tend to do something unacceptable, they will have a feeling of envy, jealousy and may make any crafty scheme to defame other candidate, albeit other candidate is more suitable for this seat.
Also, when a leader is free from any hostile feeling and have a sense of coorperation, he or she will be able to articulate his or her thoughts more stentaniously. This will help not only help government, industry, or other field, but also will help common people to choose their rightful leader. Consequensly, this will decrease the risk of tumult among people when they choose wrong leader just becaue that individual bilk his or her thoughts just in order to win.
In sum, the author's point of prepare young people for leadership in any field is by insitlling a sense of coorperation, not competition is tenable. As aferomentioned, by doing so we will have many advantages in order to choose a right and deserving candidate and will also be able to get the maximum out of them. Young people are the building block of our next generation, and let's given our next generation more eloquent, trustworthy, and coopertive people by inculcating solmen in them.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 195, Rule ID: LETS_LET[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Let's'?
Suggestion: Let's
...of the competition they will be facing. Lets say, there are two or three individuals...
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Line 5, column 380, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to wrong'
Suggestion: to wrong
...of tumult among people when they choose wrong leader just becaue that individual bilk...
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Line 7, column 227, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... have many advantages in order to choose a right and deserving candidate and will...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, may, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 58.6224719101 75% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1703.0 2235.4752809 76% => OK
No of words: 350.0 442.535393258 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86571428571 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87404855596 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 215.323595506 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.477142857143 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 537.3 704.065955056 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.5280814825 60.3974514979 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.642857143 118.986275619 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 23.4991977007 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.28571428571 5.21951772744 25% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191201569679 0.243740707755 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0783465932844 0.0831039109588 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.115184025295 0.0758088955206 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1464313966 0.150359130593 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0990421886279 0.0667264976115 148% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.1392134831 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.8420337079 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.1639044944 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 100.480337079 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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