The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
It certainly is the best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government industry, or other field is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competetion.Though it may arise some question regarding worldwide development but then again to some extend we can not always go on without helping each other.
Firstly, human nature mostly defines by its society. Any individual can not be proper without society. Isolating oneself and leading a healthy life is not compatible. So when it comes down to leading in government, industry, or other fields cooperation does required. If the young people of a certain society is competative minded then it will lead to a chaos and each will soon become isolated. Besides cooperation leads to strong bonding, trusting others. And thus whoever wins the trust of fellow companions can lead any area toward its ultimate goal.
Also if we look at the development of Japan, we can clearly see the power of cooperative leader. Japan made its journey from gudder to skyhigh through cooperating each other. If the leaders of Japan were to decide be like themselves, minding own business only they would never be able to win the trust of their fellow country folks and thus will resulted in undevelopment only.
Though it may bug us about placing one of the best in world. Without competative mind how would other country recognise us. If the leading people are competative with other country then the world will know us. But if the country itself is developed by cooperating each other, then one day they will be recognized.
With so many questions and fast leading world I will certainly agree to instilling the sense of cooperation
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 191, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Though
...a sense of cooperation, not competetion.Though it may arise some question regarding wo...
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Line 2, column 280, Rule ID: SOME_EXTEND[1]
Message: Did you mean 'extent' ("extent" is a noun, "extend" is a verb)?
Suggestion: extent
...wide development but then again to some extend we can not always go on without helping...
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...d any area toward its ultimate goal. Also if we look at the development of Japan,...
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Line 6, column 347, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'result'
Suggestion: result
...heir fellow country folks and thus will resulted in undevelopment only. Though it may...
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Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Though” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...will resulted in undevelopment only. Though it may bug us about placing one of the ...
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Line 8, column 125, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...d how would other country recognise us. If the leading people are competative with...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, if, look, may, regarding, so, still, then, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 11.3162921348 9% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 58.6224719101 70% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1424.0 2235.4752809 64% => OK
No of words: 287.0 442.535393258 65% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96167247387 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11595363751 4.55969084622 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78627152515 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 215.323595506 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.567944250871 0.4932671777 115% => OK
syllable_count: 442.8 704.065955056 63% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 70.0956656559 60.3974514979 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.0 118.986275619 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9375 23.4991977007 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.1875 5.21951772744 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180414897651 0.243740707755 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0526919657122 0.0831039109588 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0799627335949 0.0758088955206 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114814046387 0.150359130593 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.113401093083 0.0667264976115 170% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 14.1392134831 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.8420337079 128% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.1743820225 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.19 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 100.480337079 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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