"A government is known to the world by the amount of welfare and unity it brings in its people, not by gold reserves or the richenss of its treasures."
A government is one of the most cardinal elements in democracy. A government should truly be elected, of the people, by the people and for the people. A government which cannot garner up confidence among its citiznes is imminent to fail. This makes the functioning of government along wtih industry and other fields of core importance. The given statement suggests that there should be more coordination among the different sectors than competition. I partially agree with this statement for three essential reasons.
Coordination, by its etymological breakup means that there should be a sense of synchronization among its different elements to be self-effacing. Cordination is also crucial when certain sections are not able to work properly, and such situations are tackled by all its corresponding counterparts. Similarly, coordination in government always asks for a some credulity among its different sectors to work together with the ultimate goal - progress of the nation. For example, after the Hirsohama nuclear incident in mid-1950s, Japan was completely devastated. Now if there was to be any competition among the beauracrats or econonmic leaders at that point of time, we couldn't witness a nation that has been so technologically savvy and evergreen in this century.
Adding to this, coordination also leads to a sense of credibility, which makes every member or a group responsible for it's own actions.Competition on the other hand, would only cause disturbance and unnecessary commotion, in which leaders and people don't prioritise country's interests. For an instance, during the period of recession in the last decade, there was a constant struggle of power and popularity between different educated intellectuals who were criticising the policies and measures taken up by the global economy, rather than intimating measures that would ameliorate such colossal losses during that period. Had this been done effectively, people and government would have strived much better with a single goal in mind - betterment of the global economy. Fields like governance, growth,economy need unique and united ideas rather than divergent and trangressive proposals.
However, that being said, some areas of governance and its contemporaries do require a feel of competition in its core members to get better everyday. Competition is one of the most important segments that gives mankind, the will to do better day by day for themselves. Citing a example, let's take the field of education. Good governments and economies are run by able individuals not educated and friendly groups. People who strive hard, having the constant aim of being the best and the people that give their best are the ones who lay up a bright future for their faction, group or the country as a whole. A amiable set of people would not like to put their own interests or the nations interest with the fear of discord among their societies. Such societes might seem happy, but the real progress is hardly acheived.
With respect to the examples stated, I would like to say that competitions and cooperation have their own yays and nays, depending on the commodity they are being implemented in. There are some fields that require fierce competition to grow, and, at the same time, such steps could be disastrous in the progress of other fields. There has be a proper commitment and methodology through which we need to understand the essence and the dangers we face if we imbibe either of the two divergent values of human civilization.
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- TOEFL T P O 08 - Integrated Writing Task 3
- The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition. 16
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 152, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ople, by the people and for the people. A government which cannot garner up confi...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...onmic leaders at that point of time, we couldnt witness a nation that has been so techn...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Competition
...a group responsible for its own actions.Competition on the other hand, would only cause dis...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... commotion, in which leaders and people dont prioritise countrys interests. For an i...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , economy
... economy. Fields like governance, growth,economy need unique and united ideas rather tha...
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Line 9, column 142, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...ition in its core members to get better everyday. Competition is one of the most importa...
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Line 9, column 278, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...etter day by day for themselves. Citing a example, lets take the field of educati...
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Message: Use 'An' instead of 'A' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: An
...ction, group or the country as a whole. A amiable set of people would not like to...
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Message: Use past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
...the progress of other fields. There has be a proper commitment and methodology thr...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, similarly, so, as to, for example, with respect to, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.5258426966 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 14.8657303371 175% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.3162921348 168% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 33.0505617978 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 85.0 58.6224719101 145% => OK
Nominalization: 34.0 12.9106741573 263% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3103.0 2235.4752809 139% => OK
No of words: 594.0 442.535393258 134% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22390572391 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.93681225224 4.55969084622 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04805281866 2.79657885939 109% => OK
Unique words: 308.0 215.323595506 143% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518518518519 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 962.1 704.065955056 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.1758143131 60.3974514979 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.12 118.986275619 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.76 23.4991977007 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.72 5.21951772744 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176548160871 0.243740707755 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0490901174165 0.0831039109588 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0381015366024 0.0758088955206 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0908681417549 0.150359130593 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0379474442726 0.0667264976115 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 14.1392134831 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.1639044944 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 152.0 100.480337079 151% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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