The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Young generation is a prime focus for each nation. Grooming them is a big question through out the world. When we talk about grooming, leadership quality is a paramount among all other needs. Reason behind this is that it has high impact on society& different sectors like government, industry, or other fields. For a society to be educated at large extent, it need leaders. Now question arises, what would be the best way to nourish leadership quality in young people. It can be accomplished through sense of cooperation or competition. As per issue, instilling a sense of cooperation, not competion cannot be agreed completely. At some extent it is useful but competition role cannot be avoided. We can examine this through legit examples.
In a society, if you don't comsider competition, you'll not get the best result. For example, In India, there is a Joint Entrance Examination(JEE) for under graduate admission for engineering courses. Competition level is high because seats are way less compared to number of applications. It help colleges to select finest students. At the end, they perform better. They are more successful as a leader compared to other colleges. If they would have thought only about cooperation, considering development of leadership quality of each applicant, that would have given degraded results.
Considering the same example as above, students who fail in their examination gets demotivated. They lose their interest and their self worth. Many suicide cases are evident to these high level competition. If somehow they struggle and manages thier life. They fail in developing their skills, in which leadership is also missing. If they get their education from some other colleges where competition is lacking. Quality of leadership is very less compared to those JEE students.
Concluding at the end, Both should be given equal importance. A balance is must for good leadership quality among students. Which will be beneficial for government, society and other fields.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, still, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 14.8657303371 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 58.6224719101 67% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 12.9106741573 163% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1696.0 2235.4752809 76% => OK
No of words: 320.0 442.535393258 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.3 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89772944519 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 215.323595506 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.584375 0.4932671777 118% => OK
syllable_count: 522.0 704.065955056 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.2370786517 133% => OK
Sentence length: 11.0 23.0359550562 48% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.5099303288 60.3974514979 44% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 62.8148148148 118.986275619 53% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 11.8518518519 23.4991977007 50% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 1.37037037037 5.21951772744 26% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.29029684798 0.243740707755 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.065847213699 0.0831039109588 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0633445614109 0.0758088955206 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171020590099 0.150359130593 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0809144568562 0.0667264976115 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 14.1392134831 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.31 48.8420337079 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 12.1743820225 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.57 12.1639044944 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 100.480337079 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 11.8971910112 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.4 11.2143820225 57% => Gunning_fog is low.
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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