The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
The author asserts that to prepare for leadership, young people should learn how to cooperate, not competition. However, the following essay will argue that this may not always be the case.
To begin with, the author's argument that cooperation is important for leadership in government, industry, or other fields may seem persuasive. Almost every works in this society are solved as team. Industry, lab, government, even at school work goes as team-work. Therefore working as a team and be a leader of team to control people and process should be the crucial skill to be a great leader. For instance, at the job interview companies want to evaluate people with team assignment and check how they handle problems as a team becuase they never someone superb but never compromise with people. This shows how works in society goes and importance of cooperation.
However, only with the cooperation cannot install leadership for young people, but competition is also necessary. Excessive competition could be the problem, but with some tension of competition can make better conclusion. Schools usually evaluate students with differnt grades to be competitive and gets better grades. With this condition, students could work harder and be better as they grow up. Without this race, no one will make their effort for getting nothing. Competition prevents stagnation and make people to go forward with their mates. There might be no progress if there is no competence among society.
In conclusion, cooperation is always necessary for society,so as competition. To be a great leader and to get leadership, controlling both skills should be necessary for young people.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 20, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...ways be the case. To begin with, the authors argument that cooperation is important ...
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Line 3, column 265, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
... even at school work goes as team-work. Therefore working as a team and be a leader of te...
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Line 7, column 59, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , so
...peration is always necessary for society,so as competition. To be a great leader an...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, therefore, for instance, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.3162921348 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 33.0505617978 39% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 58.6224719101 51% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 18.0 12.9106741573 139% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1404.0 2235.4752809 63% => OK
No of words: 266.0 442.535393258 60% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27819548872 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03850299372 4.55969084622 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81747291998 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 215.323595506 68% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.552631578947 0.4932671777 112% => OK
syllable_count: 418.5 704.065955056 59% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 6.24550561798 16% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 15.0 23.0359550562 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.7953622482 60.3974514979 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 82.5882352941 118.986275619 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.6470588235 23.4991977007 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.05882352941 5.21951772744 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.148107567877 0.243740707755 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0581527184481 0.0831039109588 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0566027715693 0.0758088955206 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107298998836 0.150359130593 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0166799522345 0.0667264976115 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 14.1392134831 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 48.8420337079 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.1639044944 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 100.480337079 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.2143820225 71% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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