The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Today's younger generation will form the base for future prospects of a country. A child's youth will play a huge impact on his career, thus, in turn on the society in which he is living in. It is very important to nurture this child in his childhood to make him a successful person. Parents, teachers, schools and society at large will play a huge deal in this process. There are many qualities that he needs to develop before reaching a earning individual. Of which, Leadership is one of the strong pillars that forms the basis in an individual. Leadership requires many qualities like compassion, cooperation, competitiveness. The issue here focusses on building the leadership through a sense of cooperation, not by competition. I don't completely agree with the statement due to 2 reasons.
Firstly, In this globalised world, competition is everywhere in one's life. Several thousands were competing for a job/ securing a seat in university, etc. Unlike probably tens decades ago. This sense of competitiveness should be instilled in a chid from his younger age in order for him to handle it adroitly when he becomes young and mature. This is much severe for people in leadership roles as they need to exhibit high level of competitiveness in order to make his firm successful.
Secondly, Many people are falling into depression or experience panic attacks because they lack proper competitivness to compete in this modern world. Due to constant comparisions with other people/ firms, leaders need to be equipped fully to tackle broad range of issues ranging from political, global, geological etc. This takes a huge toll on their mental health and cause several health issues. This is not a quality that can be developed without nurthuring in few days. It takes years to build and it becomes part of our life not mere a skill that we execute on demand.
Some people may argue that cooperation plays a huge deal than competition. It maybe true in some cases but won't be that much effective than competitiveness.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, thus, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 14.8657303371 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 58.6224719101 89% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1682.0 2235.4752809 75% => OK
No of words: 338.0 442.535393258 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97633136095 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93067909215 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 215.323595506 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.609467455621 0.4932671777 124% => OK
syllable_count: 530.1 704.065955056 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.2979327912 60.3974514979 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 80.0952380952 118.986275619 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0952380952 23.4991977007 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.71428571429 5.21951772744 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168380358678 0.243740707755 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0420912182496 0.0831039109588 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0477521542646 0.0758088955206 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.094155751269 0.150359130593 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0666349705744 0.0667264976115 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 14.1392134831 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.8420337079 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 12.1639044944 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 100.480337079 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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